Subject: Re: [FFML] [ffml] Akane-chan Change chapter 3, 1st draft
From: "Philip Hacker" <prohackr@hotmail.com>
Date: 9/11/1998, 8:00 PM
To: wyrm@mail.utexas.edu, fanfic@fanfic.com



"You think I want everyone knowing that I'm engaged to a freak? No
thanks."

"That's another thing. Our genetic trait is supposed to be absolutely
secret. Our school's principal and our doctor are the only ones in the
area who know about it."

Who says this? Is this Akane or Futaba? The previous quote was clear
because of its content, but not the second quote.

Sumimasen. Akane deshoo.

"Do you have any idea what would happen if our secret got out?"
Futaba explained. "We'd all probably become scientific guinea pigs or
something."

He should know, recalling the Koujiro sisters: Miki, Maki and Yuki. 

Right on.


"He?" Realization dawned on the doctor. "Oh, I see."

Just a note here: Trakal has a short memory. :)

My question is, What about Kasumi? Is the good doctor still 
head-over-heels
for her, or is the sexchange thing a turn-off?

No, he's not crazy over her.

"A maiden's lips may say 'no' to that which her heart would otherwise
have construed 'aye'."

I see Kuno is still stuck in the Dork Ages. When a maiden's lips say 
'no',
she means 'no'!

Yes, but this is perfectly IC for Kunou at the time.

"But is it not the custom to give one's own name first?" interrupted
Kunou. "Fine then, mine I shall give! The rising new star of the high
school Kendou world, I remain undefeated. The mere mention of my
name strikes fear in the hearts of men. I am called the Blue Thunder 
of
Fuurinkan High." He raised his bokutou, and thunder crashed in the
background, as if on cue. "Tatewaki Kunou, age seventeen."

Watch as the Great Kunou vaporizes half the Pacific Ocean with his hot 
air! :)

You got it.

Ranma strained to keep from laughing. "The...the Blue...Thunder!?
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!"

"You dare to mock the Blue Thunder?!" Kunou charged at the laughing
Ranma.

Nah. He mocks the Blue Blunder.

(Before you ask, no the joke is not mine.)

Actually, I was planning to use that joke as well.

At that exact moment, three blurs appeared, each from a different
direction. A large black-and-white blur sped in from the main gate. A
green and brown blur descended from the roof of the school's main
building. A green and blue blur zoomed out of the doors of the main
building. Within a second, all three blurs simultaneously converged on
the two combatants. Actually, collided with the combatants is more 
like
it. The green and blue blur grabbed Ranma-chan from her position in
midair and sped back into the building carrying her slung over its 
back.
The green-and-brown blur fled the scene almost immediately, but the
black-and-white blur, which now resolved itself to be a giant panda,
remained, staring after the first two blurs.

Ha! The green-haired girl beats the panda to the punch! But who's the 
green
and brown blur?

Captain Coconut, who else?


"What?! Nobody told me I'd have to take classes as a *girl*."

Health class never taught ya this stuff!

BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! That's a good one.

The superhero's costume was light brown, with green tights and boots,
and a green cape. Atop the figure's head there was a tiny palm tree, 
and
on its chest was an emblem composed of an orange shield, within which
was set a coconut. The coconut was split open, revealing a diploma
inside.

Gee, I wonder who _that_ is? :)

Waitaminit! Brown costume, green boots, tights and cape? This wouldn't 
be
the green and brown blur, eh?

Right. Captain Coconut.



'A family of sex-changing in-laws, a crazed Kendouist, a wacky
principal, and now a superhero. This just keeps getting better and
better,' Ranma thought sarcastically.

And its about to get MUCH better! :)

Right. first Ryouga, then Shampoo. (not to mention Kunou falling in love 
with Ranma-chan)


weird haircuts). I also couldn't resist having him do an imitation of
Hirouin's "Seigi no Mitaka" (Friend of Justice) in the form of Captain
Coconut.

For some reason, I'm getting flashbacks of Monty Python and the Holy 
Grail:
"Are you suggestiing coconuts migrate?!" Heh.

You must bring me a shrubbery.

BTW: his secret identity is just as penetrable as Hirouin's.

Which means that Kuno and Ryouga will fall for it! :)

"Blast you, Captain Coconut! I shall wreak my revenge upon you yet!"

Thought so!

Now:

Does Kunou have a crush on Futaba-chan?

No. I thought that *two* half-boy, half-girls would be enough for him.

Where's Mizaki-chan?

Misaki does not go to Fuurinkan, but she will be mentioned, and 
occasionally seen.

What about P-chan?

You'll see.

(Lots of -chan's, eh?)

How does Happousai handle a Shimeru (ie, without the boobies 
disappearing
on him)?

That's why he prefers the Shimeru *boys*. They make great 
students/lackeys/suckers, and when you get them excited, they turn into  
gorgeous babes! The best of both worlds!

And what about Ranma's underthings situation?
 H: "It's Ranma's fault! All he has to do is wear the bra, but NOOOO!"
 R: "Do you have to say it so LOUD!?!"
  ***
 R: "Hey! I'm a guy! Guys don't wear lingerie!"
 F: "I'm a guy and I wear lingerie. You don't see me complaining."
 R: "Well, NORMAL guys don't wear lingerie!!"
 F: "You just don't get it, do you Ranma? You're NOT normal!"

Pretty good, but the joke isn't necessarily good enough for me to hold 
off on the rest of the gang trying to get Ranma into girls' clothes.

When are we going to see Kasumi-kun?

What would make Kasumi tense? Seriously, though, Kasumi-kun is Tofu's 
assistant nurse-in-training. 

What about the "man-amonst-men" promise?

Nodoka will still want to kill Genma, but as for Ranma, she will be torn 
between seeing that he was railroaded into it and seeing that he accepts 
it to a degree (if I time it right, she should arrive just about the 
time when Ranma is starting to seriously doubt that he wants out of the 
engagement).

The possibilities are endless!

That they are.


Phil

prohackr@hotmail.com


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