Subject: Re: [FFML] Ranma fic idea.
From: "Trakal" <Trakal@map.com>
Date: 9/10/1998, 10:01 AM
To: ffml@fanfic.com, "Always Man" <always_man@hotmail.com>

Galaxy Police File 10 Sep 98 
 Always is reported to have said... 


"Consolation," Kuno-chan.  One 'l'.  Yes, that's true... so substitute
Kodachi... I've seen an Elseworlds fic (was it the original Akane 1/2?)
where they encounter each other, she gets lost with him, and he 
teaches her the joy of fighting honorably.  Imagine that, a virtuous 
Kodachi  ^_^  Of course, the fact that there's a precedent makes it 
difficult to match or top...

I read that one. I found the match-up to handled poorly; the author 
seemed to simply decide that they were going to work out as a couple and 
magically changes Kodachi. I didn't buy it, and it ended up being 
boring.


1. The phrase match-up to handled poorly is a syntax error. 
    Also, what AM actually meant to say is ambiguous:

Did AM mean "the match-up to Kodachi"
		      Too as in "Also" which might be better written as 

"Also, I found the match-up was handled poorly."
		       Too as in overly which might sound better if written: 
"I found the match-up was handled too poorly."

Secondly, the ;  can be easily eliminated and the remainder broken down into a couple 
of shorter sentences.		
	
The author seemed to simply decide that they were going to work out as a couple. Then
the author magically changes Kodachi to make this work. (note: this is an example not an 
opinion.)

Watashi wa GP toko Tantei desu