There are precious few fanfic writers who put out prose more bloated
than Mark Latus--and you're one of them. I have relatively high
standards, but I have a strong literary constitution so I can trudge
through writing far below my standards--except this piece. The prose
are so horrendously inflated with useless qualifiers and other
baggage that I can't stand reading through it. I skip by one massive
paragraph after another, and I can't find the meat.
I can't comment on the artistic value of the piece because the prose
are so broken that I can't handle going through them. When writing,
always ask yourself: "Do I need to write this?" and "Can I make it
any simpler?". What you've done here is fall victim to diarrhea of
the mouth.
Dear Always Man,
While I really do appreceate the fact that you read and responded to my
work, I found that your response was truly obnoxious and tasteless. You
claim that you have high literary standards and a strong literary
constitution. What a coincedence, so do I. In fact, one of my preferred
authors is a man by the name of Terry Prachet. Maybe you have heard of
him. Surprisingly, he too writes in this form of prose, with "useless
qualifiers" which, in my humble opinion, tend to add to the overall
"meat" of the literary peice. Now, while I realize that I am just a
minority of readers (and probably of what you would consider beneath
your "high literary standards), it seems to me that quite a few poeple
agree with me that such a form of writting quite enjoyable. Now, while I
realize that it might not compare to the high standards of literature
that you seem to enjoy, it is perfectly suitable for this type of light
creative thinking. Incidently, I would like you to notice that the
purpose of this entire section was mostly to introduce some farily
important characters. I'm sure that if I just started mouthing of about
these new people without some sort description, you and many other
people would have become even more confused/annoyed.
But more importantly, I found that even with your vaunted standards and
constitution, all you really wanted to do was bash anothers hard work.
Your comments on my story were just so much trash. Ture, I do have to
work on my tendency to be meticulous to a fault (a trait which you no
doubt have noticed by now) but if you so believe that my story was just
running on and broken, a far better an much more constructive way of
telling me this would be to give a few examples. Tragically, I am unable
of being as critical of my own work as others might be, so I will no
doubt be blind as to which areas really could use more work. Now I have
the utmost respects for critics -really, I do!- but when all the critic
does is harp exclusively on the worser aspects of something with out
providing any positive or helpful comments, I can only shake my head in
disgust and wonder about said critics qualifiactions for such comments.
Incidently, I have a small challange for you. I have noticed that you
do not seem to do much more than critize others works. Therefore, I
challange you to write a short 'fic of your own to be compared with a
short 'fic of my own. This is not being forced upon you in anyway shape
or form, this is just a friendly contest a chance to show off your high
standards and give me a chance to see what a 'fic that stands up to your
standards looks like. I will not be judging whatever you may chose to
write, I humbly ask the rest of the FFML to do so and reply as to who's
'fic was better. I give you two months to do so, and any silence or
negation on your part will not be taken badly. This is an open
invitation to all 'fic authors and I beleive that it will be a learning
experience for all. Oh, and if you do win, Always man, you may be secure
in the knowledge that you beat a 15 year old girl who is just trying
her hand out writting.
Sincerly and with many profuse appologies for the length,
Wyvern Quetzel, fantasy fanatic
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