It would work, as a premise, but what you've outlined has nothing to do 
with this fic. There was nothing Ryouga was trying achieve in this fic, 
no desire he wanted to fulfil, no lust he wanted to indulge in.

*snip*

There's an abbreviated re-write of this fic.

Better judges and fanfic authors than you have already read and judged
this 'fic, and it was actually pretty damned good.

Ah! I know what it is! Fanfic author evy!

You can't write an enjoyable fanfic to save your life, can you? So you
pick on other good fanfics because you're upset that your own suck?

*patpat* You poor, poor little dear...

"Those who can, write. Those who can't, critisise (in a very non
constructive way)."

*patpat* Here's some money - go buy a life, okay?

Kun-chan...
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