First of all, David, this is excellent.  This is quickly turning into
my favorite AltReal (tm) fanfic of all time.

Wonderful prose, and a breathtaking view into a woman struggling to
hold on to sanity.

Minor nits:

You're injecting very un-Ranmaverse-like realism by having Ranma
bruise himself and Kuno break his arm.  That's fine, of course, and I
approve of such realism.  However, *if* your version of the Ranmaverse
would make such injuries likely, then Ranma and Kuno shouldn't jump
out the third story window like they did, IMO.

Also, I think the "I wish he'd broken his neck" line was a bit too
cruel.  I know you're trying to show the worst side of the Tendo
sisters to Kodachi so that she can come away with a one-sided view,
but the "broken neck" line was just a little over the top, especially
since Kuno's lying there with a broken arm.  Something better would be
"he got what he deserved" or something like that; it would be okay for
Akane to think that a broken arm was punishment enough for the way
he's been coming on to her.  Again, my opinion only.

The rest of this was very good, and I very much liked the
Ranma/Kodachi by-play.  It'll be quite interesting to see where you go
with this.

-Richard
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