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I like the fic.

A few comments though.

The beginning of the story left me hanging and really confused. Only 
when I got to the middle and the end did I find a few of my questions 
answered. (I haven't seen or heard about the anime Futaba Kun Change * 
is the title right* before reading this fic.) 

Oh yeah, what does futaba look like anyway, I read through the fic and 
found nothing describing what futaba looked like.

And as for a few suggestions. 

Maybe you could give them second names i.e. like Ranko for Ranma (IMHO 
It helps me separate the characters even more.)

And during the actual changing of the characters, Akane becoming a guy 
when she was fighting with Ranma suddenly left me confused at that part 
then finding Akane as a girl the next sentence. You might want to clear 
that one up.

And as for grammar or spelling, I won't even go into that, God knows I'm 
not good with that.

Anyway, keep up the good work. I'd like to see more of this.

Ps. Do you know any good site about Futaba - kun change. I'd like to 
know more about this series.

Sincerely
~ Kahlil Noriega

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  Envious of love, not of immortality. " 

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