At 01:19 AM 29/08/98 PDT, Philip Hacker wrote:

Here is the other Ranma/Futaba-kun fusion that I promised.
Akane-chan Change
written by Phil Hacker
Chapter I: An Unlikely Match

[snip]

"What?!" Realization began to sink in. "If you want me to marry one of
them...and they all change sexes when excited...then *that* means that
I'M SUPPOSED TO BE A MOTHER?!?!!" She grabbed Genma and
hoisted him by his shirt. "Tell me this is all a joke Old Man," she
growled, hatred in her eyes.

(And out there, somewhere, a brown-haired chef and a purple-haired huntress
felt a surge of hope, without really knowing why.)

Well, let's face it: I can't see why Ranma would stick around - a normal
guy would run off at the suggestion of being the mother of a family, and
Ranma's far more macho/homophobic than the normal guy. Add to that Akane's
'racism', so to speak, and there's just no reason he would feel welcome
at all in that house. 

On a more general note, you're going over a lot of rehashed ground in this
opener, and that tends to put people off. It really doesn't hurt to skip
scenes that everyone knows has happened, or shortening them to the bare
necessities. The kami know my delete finger itches every time I see that
'I'm Ranma, sorry about this' (or insert name of cursee if it isn't Ranma)
line in opening altern fics. While personally I'm curious to see where this
goes, the sooner you can avoid rehash scenes the better - they tend to kill
interest in reading the fic. At least, they do with me.

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Love triangle getting you down? One word: threesome.