Heh heh heh.

Okay, I read the second draft. Having missed the first one, this was 
my first read-through, and I have a few things to say... ^_^

1) Kunou was excellent. While I thought that his reaction to Ranma 
getting a glimpse up Akane's skirt was a bit more out of character 
than was neccessary, he does fit the Motomura part quite well. ^_^ 
For the fellow who commented that with Ranma's ego and Kunou's... 
umm... traits... they wouldn't really turn out as friends -anyway-... 
remember how Motomura is? ^_^ Notice, also, that this Ranma seems a 
bit more submissive than normal... Altogether, though, the trio of 
Hiroshi, Daisuke, and Kuno is wonderfully done. ^_^

2) A nitpick, but shouldn't it have been Kunou who gave the line 
about Ranma bettering himself? Motomura/Kuno was really the only 
character in the original FKC that cared that much about those types 
of things, and I really can't picture Hiroshi (Takeru?) saying that. 
:)

3) The Nabiki-Negiri analog was also very well done... I liked how it 
emphasized the differences in their money-grubbing style, while still 
fitting in seamlessly...

Altogether, I liked it! My only problem is that the core Ranma 
characters don't seem to fit in very well -- Akane isn't very much 
like Misaki, and Ranma is nothing like Futaba -- so they need to be 
heavily modified to fit in. I would suggest possibly using Ukyou 
instead of Akane... and then Ooka Shina (the lesbian rapist from 
volume four, remember? ^_^) could be Tsubasa! Woo! :) Ranma would 
have to stay Ranma, of course, but Shampoo could be Kurin... or not. 
The possibilities are endless. ^_^ You want to stay away from making 
the fusion slew over to one side too much, though... for instance, if 
Shampoo is intended to be in the Kurin role, she doesn't neccesarily -
have- to eat that much, but she should still use bonboris. Just so 
that you don't fall into the trap of "FKC with Ranma names", if you 
see what I mean. ^_^

All in all, it's a lot better than the Ranma/FKC crossover that I was 
writing (continuing the one by Ken Arromdee) would have turned out, 
had I finished it! ^_^;;

Adam-kohai

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