Jeffrey "OneShot" Wong
Neon Genesis Evangelion: Self-procreate

Didn't reading that give you that warm and fuzzy feeling ;)
I know, it's OOC, but I had to write it.....sorry for any mistakes.

Actually if you look at the fact that this is an older Shinji that had saved
the world it's not all the OOC.  The only think would be Rei having a babby,
but I cann't remember if her not beening able to have children is cannon or
not.  As for mistakes there were only a few.  I'll list what I saw below to
help out when you edit this.  Overall a nice WAFF fic :)

 "It�s a boy!!" the doctor said.

With two exclimation points I would say he did more then just "said" that.
More like Exclaimed.

 "I�m a father!" Shinji said, tears almost streaming from his eyes, tears

of

joy. He couldn�t belive that he was going to be a father. Nothing could

make


believe is misspelled.

 At that moment, a nurse entered the maternity ward and said, "Sir, there

is

someone here to see you,"

Entered is misspelled.

 Gendo said nothing. The thought of not being able to see his grandson

pained

him. It pained him even more that Shinji�s resentment toward him was all

because

he had been a terrible father, a terrible human being toward him, a

terrible

person.

You should probally end the list with "and a terrible person"

Also a number of sentences end with comas when within quotes and not
periods.


Tom

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