At 14:52 8/24/1998 +0800, Chan Wei Lik wrote:

After some more reading and thinking, I feel that the problems in this fic
can be traced to inadequate charaterization of Verthandi. She may be part of
Belldandy, but without her heart, she is quite a different person. You've
got quite some explaining to do as to why she suddenly changed her mind
about rejoining with Belldandy. We need to know more of her (V) first.
That's why it felt unconvincing to me.

And as for me, I thought Verthandi was characterized pretty well apart from
the abrupt change.  Perhaps all that's needed is another scene before the
change, when she makes some more justice-without-mercy decisions and gets
appalled at the results, instead of changing anything before?

Heop to read your revised work soon.

Same here!