At 13:49 8/21/1998 CDT, Redneck Gaijin wrote:

(Rules for submitting stories for review at the end of the list.)

       Well, I got some offers of stories, and here's what I was able to
read through and analyze:

       TITLE: KONATSU MASQUERADE SOLILOQUY: Ranma, Ukyou
       AUTHOR: UKYOUKWNJI@AOL.COM
       SERIES: Ranma 1/2

      (a) Technical: 4

       Only minor flaws, here, and not many of them.

       (b) Continuity: 0

       I just don't see anything of Ranma 1/2 in these shorts at all. Both
are fairly dark or sad, with absolutely none of the original style of the
stories, and neither Ukyou nor Konatsu seems even close to being IC. Konatsu
in particular is a glaring flaw- as the narrator, his character should be
the most developed of all, and nothing is done with him besides
demonstrating the stereotype version of him. Very dissapointing, all told.

Actually, the narrator doesn't have to be the main character.  For example,
in _To_Kill_a_Mockingbird_, Scout Finch narrates but her father Atticus is
the main character.  I got the impression that UkyouKwnji was aiming for the
same effect here, with Konatsu narrating what happens to the main character
Ukyou.

As for me, I liked the stories and thought the characterization was pretty
close.