Why are you writing this in the third-person omniscient?  Isn't this
supposed to be narrated by Senchi?  Senchi could not possibly know 

about

some of the things you've put in here.

-- David

I held a vote among the patrons of the FFML.  Those who deigned to 
respond voted 16-5 in favor of writing each side-story as a present 
tense fic.  Not a narrative.

The interlude following Fragile Flower will lead up to the next 
side-story.

"The choice has been made.  Be aware of the consequences."

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