Aah, another long-dormant series finally gets some well-deserved
life breathed into it!

I found this fic to be pointless. Nothing happens. Nothing interesting 
is said. There is no character development. There is no purpose. There 
is no direction. The prose aren't all that bad, but their content is so 
ho-hum that they can't help but be tedious.

Whenever I see a fic like this, I have to ask what the author is trying 
to do with it, because it seems to have absolutely no purpose.

How to fix it? Give it a premise. Give it a beginning and an end. Give 
the characters a problem that must be solved and that will lead to 
character growth. Cut out the filler. Insert meaningful dialogue. In 
other words, delete everything you've done and start over.

I'm sorry if I can't come up with something nicer, but I call them like 
I see them. This fic is irredeemably Bad--I don't particularly get 
enjoyment out of saying that, but I won't lie to you.


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