Um. A fine story I guess, though it feels a bit overtly
stereotypical (or whatever a better word is). In a way, I'd say
it suffers from being a Ranma title, since that really matters
little beyond the names and gives the reader some mistaken
preconceptions about the contents.

(That, or I'm just having a bad day, since I seem to have been
highly negative lately.)

And now, some random thoughts while reading:

18; that'll be a good point.  Until that time, they'll live as normal 
children."  Midori looked with fondness at the two children.  Her 

Normal children?

You know, the Ranma-tag makes me suspect they won't turn out all
that normal. ^_^

	In class, things seemed the same as always.  Except for the 
person sitting next to Nabiki.  She didn't notice a thing, but this 
was one of the trickier chapters of calculus and she was turning 
almost her full attention to it.  Besides, she knew there were certain 

Huh? "but"? The only way I can make sense out of that would be
"hse didn't notice that it was tricky" and that doesn't make
sense either. ^_^

	Instead of saying anything, Nabiki backed away, wondering where 
Kuno had found help so quickly.

Oh, Kuno (and Nabiki?) as the main stars. Surprise. ^_-;;;

	"Ey, Tatchi!  I tink it's time fo' de monthly cut!"  The rather more 
than slightly deranged principal of Furinkan high school, a man the 

...

"rather more than slightly"?

	"Don't worry.  We'll all be reunited soon enough.  But right 
now, I here you're having some problems.  I think I can help you with 

hear

	"Kyoji's escaped.  I think he'll come here.  To deal with the 
rest of his family."  The grim look on her face was all Toman needed 
to know that she wasn't kidding.  Not that she ever kidded.

Wasn't he "Tamon" before?

	"No unnecessary risks.  I would like to keep the sane brother in 
the family."  She smiled and touched his hand.

You know, that wasn't even funny. ^_^

	Tatewaki had his blade drawn and was looking at Kyoji's back.  
Again, the list of possibilities where he could place his blade in his 
brother's back ran through his mind.

"possibilities", IMO, really doesn't sound good here.

	"So for your precious experiment, you sacrificed me.  You made 
me your science whore because everyone else was smart enough to not 
want to give up their children!  But not you!  Not the great genius 
Kuno...  Your science was more important than your family!" he 
screamed at her.  "And look what it's done.  Your science has killed 
us all finally."

"all, finally" or "has finally killed us all"


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Ronny Hedin, thark@hem2.passagen.se, http://nabiki.newberry.edu/thark/
        "So, they aren't extraterrestials?"
        "Nope, they're manga characters who've lost their hair."
        (the unexpected end of X-files)