Jason Liao <jasonl@hun.k12.nj.us> wrote:

Ryouga and Akari?  Is this why the abbreviation for Hearts and Minds is
HaM?

Nah, just a lucky coincidence. :)

It sounds like the blast missed Ranma, and hit the tree.  However, in the
next paragraph, you state that Ranma stands up, and dusted himself.
Perhaps make the actions in this area more clear?  Does Ranma get hit, or
does he not?

He does. I'll change it to clarify.

And Kuno... he ran off to Jusenkyo. Ranma didn't see how
that one could be called his fault -- he hadn't exactly been in good
enough mental condition at the time to do anything about it -- but he
still wished it hadn't happened.

This seems out of place.  Why would Ranma care about Kuno at this point in
time?  After all, he's been nothing but a bother.

It's not so much that he cares about Kuno -- rather, he feels partly
responsible for Kuno going off to Jusenkyo.

The front door goes straight to the kitchen?  What kind of house is this?

I dunno, may have to adjust this a bit. She (or someone like her) does
get Ranma with that water all the time....

	"Tell me," Kaede continued, "does Ryoga harbor a lot of negative
emotions? Hate, anger, that sort of thing?"

Why should this matter, if it's a family curse?

The theory is that the negativity serves as an anchor for the curse. One
reason why anything bad that happens seems to avoid Kasumi. :)

Out of curiosity, have you read the Xanth series?  Just something I've
been wondering.

No, I haven't.

All in all, pretty good, though I liked it a little less than the others.

That's OK. As always, I appreciate the commentary!


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics