Subject: [FFML] [Reviews-list] Reviews List for July 18 - 24, 1998
From: "Shunsuke" <shunsuke@mailcity.com>
Date: 8/3/1998, 6:00 PM
To: ffml@ffml.fanfic.com

                   The FFML Reviews List
                   =====================

This list is sorted by series, and within each series, ordered
alphabetically, according to last names.  The synopses here
represent whatever has been sent to us, from Saturday to Friday.

Reviews given are done by the person listed in soft parentheses above 
the review.  If you have any comments or criticisms, please direct them
to that reviewer.

  Paul      <arezina@acad1.stvincent.edu>
  Helen     <Helen@eiw-ca.com>
  Shunsuke  <shunsuke@mailcity.com>


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[Crossovers]

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Title: Decision
Series: Tenchi Muyo!/Ranma .5/King of Fighters
Genre: comedy?
Authors: Firefly and Scuzzy
Emails: firefly1@hotmail.com (Firefly); lair@trinidad.net (Scuzzy)
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Towers/7210/triad.html

Date Sent to FFML: early July '98

Summary:

Tenchi Masaki has finally made a decision...

{Shunsuke}
   I really don't know what's going on here, and I think the author 
   is making the mistake of assuming people know the events he's 
   alluding to.  Bringing in characters from other series doesn't 
   do much except to suggest Tenchi's actions by their presence, 
   which, for me, doesn't help.  Yes, I know all about Happosai, 
   but unless the author is suggesting Tenchi is becoming a lech, 
   this didn't make sense.

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Title: Their Name is Legion Chapters 1-3/?
Series: Ranma 1/2 and Legion of Super-Heroes
Genre: Crossover
Author: Scott K. Jamison
Email: majks@cyberx.com

Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Flats/5990

Date Sent to FFML: July 20, 1998
Size: Various

Summary:

The Legionnaire called Apparition finds herself in Nerima,
Japan, and meets Ranma.  When her friends come to pick her up, they find
themselves embroiled in a battle with a newly-upgraded villain....

{Paul}
   One of the main problems with LSH is that there are at least three
   different series, by my count. There's the first, started by
   Superboy and an improbable trip into the future... which segues
   into the second, dealing with clones of the Legionnaires and/or
   alternate timelines, and the third, freshly reformatted after Zero
   Hour. And, since I more or less exhasted my dad's comic collection
   with the first two, I was having a hard time placing this. But I
   am saturated enough to recognize main characters and suchlike.

   AAAAnyway. It's a valid premise, something a lot of other crossovers
   lack. And there's very little in the way of fighting, which is also
   something a lot of other crossovers lack. And someone actually takes
   advantage of the tech jump which comes from crossoverage, which is
   definitely something other crossovers lack. Though I think pantsuit
   boy has been reading one too many old DC Comics.

   "Crossdresser Lad"? BAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA...

   But I kept getting the feeling of "haven't we been this way
   before"...simply because a lot of bad crossovers happen this way. Ah
   well. 14 or 15 out of 20.

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Title: Their Name is Legion 4/?
Series: Ranma 1/2 & Legion of Super-Heroes
Genre: Crossover
Author: Scott K. Jamison
Email: majks@cyberx.com

Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Flats/5990

Date Sent to FFML: July 22, 1998
Size: 9 Kb

Summary:

The mysterious villain kicks around Ranma and the Legion for
a bit, then delivers an ultimatum.

{Paul}
   You know, given a few of Tarou's quotes in the manga... "With these,
   even world conquest won't be impossible!"... he actually makes
   pretty good Golden Age supervillain material. Which is kind of
   weird, considering he doesn't even really WANT world conquest. A
   nice bit wherein the LSH just sort of tries not to laugh at Tarou's
   demands. Of course, considering the guy can level them with a
   thought... but still, it's definitely getting surreal...but then,
   surreal is sometimes the norm for the folks at DC. 15 or 16 out of
   20.

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Title: A World Without A Future; Day 2
Series: Crossover; SM, TM!, BGC, YUA, DC Comics
Genre: Futuristic Post Apocalyptic Horror
Author: Adam Christopher Leigh
Email: Omicron@sprynet.com

Homepage: http://dogbert.simplenet.com

Date Sent to FFML: July 21, 1998
Size: 44 Kb

Summary:

The Sailor Scouts were working to bring about a Utopia, the
Crystal Tokyo of everyone's dreams. They Failed.  This is the future,
a world reeling from the impact of an Asteroid that hit the Pacific
Ocean 20 years ago, a city named after a once prosperous one, isolated
from the blizzard in a large cylindrical column.  Americans, Japanese,
Chinese, Jurains, wrapped together in over 40 million tons of decaying
metal, all alone in the cold.

Day 2 brings the cast of Bubblegum Crisis into the picture and the
incredible story of their origin.  Meanwhile Ami explains a bit about
how NewMetropolis works to Makoto.

{Paul}
   And the cinema just keeps on rollin'. Excellent description, very
   nice plot, very, very little to falter here. Vivid writing backed
   up by equally vivid thought. 18 or 19 out of 20, easily... possibly
   even 20 of 20. The tendrils of life begin to find each other...

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Title: Storm Warnings
Series: BGC/HL
Genre: Xover
Author: Trboturtle
Email: trboturtle@aol.com

Homepage: http://members.aol.com/trboturtle

Date Sent to FFML: July 25, 1998

Summary:

A woman is shot by a senior member of GENOM, and Ducan Macleod gets
a call from an old friend.....

{Shunsuke}
   The "Highlander" part of this series clearly follows the TV
   storyline and not the movie, so part of whether you like this 
   will be personal preference of source material.

   This first two parts are written as setup for later parts, not 
   really delving into the action side of things.  There's not too 
   much BGC related stuff yet aside from references to boomers and 
   the GENOM exec, but this is a promising start.  I questioned
   what GENOM would possibly gain from killing immortals, but out 
   of interest, and not criticism.

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Title: Switch:  Odds and Ends:  Tree
Series: Ranma 1/2 (with cameos from Here is Greenwood, Sailor Moon S,
           Maison Ikkoku and The Three-Fold God's Path)
Genre: Alternate History (Delusional)
Author: Nikholas "Switch" F. Toledo
Email: niftol@i-manila.com.ph

Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Flats/3145/switchf.html

Date Sent to FFML: July 24, 1998
Size: 36 Kb

Summary:

A divergence.  Hidden messages and innuendo abound.

{Paul}
   "When Ryouga Met Ukyou." Again and again and again! If you're not
   used to Switch's even-more-fragmented-and-funny-than-Adams-and-
   Pratchett writing style, you'll be hopelessly lost. Heck, _I_
   think I'm used to it and I'm hopelessly lost. But it's a nice
   collection of little comic vignettes with no purpose other than to
   back up a rather unlikely pairing. 9 of 10 for sheer humor... 15
   or 16 of 20 overall.

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[Iczelion]

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Title: Where Does My Heart Beat Now? - Part 3...Take 2
Series: Iczelion
Genre: action / drama / little bit of "shojo ai" romance
          (I hope to heck I got that right)
Author: Brian Yaple
Email: BYapes@erie.net

Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Pagoda/8768

Date Sent to FFML: July 22, 1998
Size: 17.5 KB

Summary:

Second try, same as the first, only stretching out the battle and
drama a bit.

{Shunsuke}
   I have pretty much the same things to say as before about the 
   parts that didn't change; as for those that did, well...the 
   author added some silliness and changed a few bits in the combat 
   scenes, but there's really not much different.  Personally, 
   though, this worked better when it was just serious.

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[Ranma 1/2]

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Title: Sword and Sorcery, chapter 18
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Fantasy
Author: D.Fire
Email: phongb9@idt.net

Homepage: http://idt.net/~phongb9/

Date Sent to FFML: July 23, 1998
Size: 38 Kb

Summary:

Tossed into another world, one where magic isn't so uncommon, the main
characters from Ranma 1/2 grow up into new lives and new identities.
When memories return, Ranma (now known as Raeni) searches for his
compatriots trying to untangle the prophecy that brought them to this
world.

{Shunsuke}
   A logical continuation of what happened before, but more of a "fill 
   in the blanks" story, this feels to me.  The author still seems to
   be working on set up rather than getting into the action and big 
   events.  You can only do this for so long before something has to 
   happen, so I hope things begin in earnest soon.

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Title:  Ranma:  Someday Never Comes
Series:  Ranma 1/2
Genre: Next Generation
Author: David Homerick
Email: dhomeric@jps.net

Date Sent to FFML:  July  19, 1998
Size:  25 Kb, 7 Kb

Summary:

Twenty years after Ranma 1/2, Ranma and Akane Tendo and Ryoga and
Shampoo Hibiki are eking out a living in an economically devastated Japan.
Meanwhile, a young man named Hidoshi Unryuu embarks on a quest to find his
father -- and kill him.

{Paul}
   This is definitely not what I expected out of the future... but it
   kinda fits. The interactions between the "new" characters have been
   set up rather nicely, for the most part, and the "old" characters
   are still acting recognizably like themselves, though age and love
   have done wonders to smooth a few rough edges. All in all, a rather
   nice depiction of what could be. 15 or 16 out of 20.

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Title: Twilight Existence 14/?
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Alternate Universe
Author: Scott K. Jamison
Email: majks@cyberx.com

Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Flats/5990

Date Sent to FFML: July 25, 1998
Size: 12 Kb

Summary:

In this Alternate Universe, the Jyuusenkyo springs change
minds as well as bodies.  Thus Ranko Saotome is a personality of her own,
who must deal with a life shared with a brother she cannot meet.
Ukyou Kuonji joins the cast, and he seems to have taken a shine
to Ranko (and vice versa).  But what does the okonomiyaki chef really
want?

{Paul}
   I was wondering when you'd get around to this... without a Ranma to
   slake her thirst for revenge (and, coincidentally, entirely reverse
   it), Ukyou is turning her attentions to the next best target...
   Ranma's sister. Reality is going to come down HARD on Ranko, and I
   don't envy her at all for it. 17 or 18 out of 20, because this is
   so darned interesting...

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Title: Hearts and Minds Prelude 2 - Kuonji Ukyo: Name and Likeness [revised]
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Continuation
Author: Gary Kleppe
Email: kleppe@execpc.com

Homepage: http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics.html

Date Sent to FFML: July 20, 1998
Size: 32 Kb

Summary:

Seven years after the end of the Ranma 1/2 series, Kuno
Tatewaki comes to Ukyo's restaurant, in search of fighters to help
defend the Amazon village. We flash back to see what Ukyo's been doing
since the end of the manga: A visit from Ranma and Akane, pursuit from
two unwanted suitors, and an offer from a company wanting to start a
chain of restaurants based on hers.

Oh, and Ukyo kisses Sanzenin Mikado, and he's not happy about it.

{Paul}
   This is a character study thinly disguised as a story. One must
   feel genuinely sorry for Ukyou... her dreams are just sort of
   ripped away from her and no-one at all seems to care... and then
   she finds that she wasn't dreaming of such great things after all.
   Kuno's slowly-growing web of quasi-normalcy draws her in at the
   very end, after some truly tortuous times. Light on description,
   but heavy on the thoughts and feelings of the major players...
   that's what makes a character study, no? 17 or 18 out of 20.

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Title: [Wheel of Fire] #3: End of the Beginning
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Continuation
Author: Razorclaw X
Email: spiceoflife@hotmail.com

Homepage: http://www.crosswinds.net/anaheim/~slythe/ranma/ranff.html

Date Sent to FFML: July 24, 1998
Size: 50 Kb

Summary: Now that Ranma and Akane's affairs are reasonably in order,
they decide to tie the knot. Of course, when three-thousand years of
Chinese Amazon tradition is at stake, anything can happen!

{Paul}
   Everyone's going sane! Everyone's... hey, why am I panicking? Sane
   is GOOD. I think. Of course, Kodachi going sane is perhaps not so
   good. And the wedding drawn up in sanity but descending into
   insanity is definitely not so good, but funny nonetheless. So tell
   me... was it here or in Lord Archive's series that the Wedding From
   Pandemonium, Mark II was first coined? Funny in places, lots of
   hard-right-turn character development in places, but overall... 14
   or 15 out of 20.

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Title: I don't like Mondays
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Song-fic / Sad
Author: Ryoucilo
Email: bogue@negia.net

Date sent to FFML: June 19, 1998
Size: 6 Kb

Summary:

A fic set to the song by The Boomtown Rats.

{Paul}
   I am utterly convinced that there are two seperate people using
   Ryoucilo's account. The second writes pieces like this. Of course,
   I don't know the song all that well... but I've heard it, at least
   tangentially...and this is completely and utterly chilling, but a
   distinct possibility.  With all the wackos in Nerima... someone,
   someday, may decide to start packing heat. And this is what happens
   when bullets take the place of chi blasts. 10 of 10 on the short
   scale.

{Shunsuke}
   Hmm...shades of TBE.  This is a "video description" type songfic, 
   which doesn't really let the reader know what it happenning.  You 
   can see the events clearly, but there's no explanation, no dialogue.  
   For some songfics this works, but here doesn't convey any sense of 
   horror or dismay at the events that happen.  Having the characters 
   talking would have done more to drive home the emotions.

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Title: The Great Song of Indifference
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Songfic
Author: Ryoucilo
Email: bogue@negia.net

Date Sent to FFML: July 20, 1998
Size: 6 Kb

Summary:

A fic set to the song by Bob Geldof.

{Paul}
   And the first writes pieces like this. 10 of 10 for COMPLETELY
   different reasons. I recognize a bit from "Kasumi's Guest" in
   here... this just blows the whole thing up to even more extreme
   extremes. Complete and utter insanity, and the Kasumi-on-Prozac
   self taking it all in gleeful, empty-minded stride.

   You know, I've got a theory that whenever something is written...
   it IS happening, in some alternate dimension. *shudder at the
   implications*

{Shunsuke}
   Much better than the other, even if this song isn't as well known
   as the other.  This songfic is a laugh, wholly apporpriate for the
   song, and the descriptions are much more evocative of images.

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Title: The Mail Order Groom/ Boarder/ Servant
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: New Character / Comedy
Author: Ryoucilo
Email: bogue@negia.net

Date: July 18, 1998
Size: 8 Kb

Summary:

Kuno sends away for a mail order groom for
his wacky sister Kodachi. But what he doesn't know is
that the groom doesn't know he's supposed to be the
groom! Doesn't that sound like it's zany and fun?!
It doesn't? Well screw you!

{Paul}
   Still more of the first Ryoucilo. And the sick thing is that I was
   actually accepting this as remotely possible. 8 of 10 on the short
   scale.

{Shunsuke}
   This is *definitely* not a self-insertion (or if it is, the author 
   has got one hell of a low opinion of himself ^_^).

   Obviously nobody bothered to read the fine print here, or if they 
   did, they didn't know the language.  At least the guy's not a lech, 
   but I can't imagine Kodachi taking a shine to him, other than her 
   shoes.  I like this start, and as a short series, this could work.

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Title: Lost and Forgotten Book 0, prologue and Chapter one
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Original flavor/SI
Author: Jeremy Thompson
Email: jthompson@badlands.4eyes.net

Homepage:
http://www.geocities.com/~azatlan/Special-Series/lost-and-forgotten.html

Date Sent to FFML: July 24, 1998
Size: 20 Kb

Summary:

This is a part of Lost and Forgotten that covers the events
between the prologue and Ryoga and Jude arriving in Nerima.  It details
Ryoga saving Jude from the wreck and their first day of wandering about the
country-side.

{Shunsuke}
   The writing here is nice and easy to read, and the events have a 
   good flow and pace, it's just...well, this didn't really add
   anything new to the already existing parts.  It's good stuff, but 
   I'd rather see later parts of the series.

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Title: Birthdays-Ranma
Series: Birthdays
Genre: WAFFy
Author: Michael Won
Email: skeezy5@geocities.com

Date Sent to FFML: July 18, 1998
Size: 14 Kb

Summary:

2nd part of Birthdays series.  A fairly short, WAFFy piece
about Ranma and Akane.  Alternate Gag ending provided for those
who can't stomach WAFFy stuff.

{Paul}
   Hmm. A lot happened between Manga and Now. Then again, if Palmer-san
   can come up with "Winter", I have little doubt that this is also
   legit...especially since the two don't actually do anything more
   serious than close-proximity whispers. This is, as the author said,
   the sort of Ranma and Akane we saw before things started getting
   absolutely and irrevocably nutso.  Simple imagery and a few simple
   acts which are nonetheless terribly difficult for their
   performers... 9 out of 10, as this was obviously intended as a
   vignette and little more.

{Shunsuke}
   The author says Akane and Ranma are OOC, but the only thing OOC I
   see is no interruptions. ^_^  Whether he intended it or not, this 
   deals with the question of "Would they get along better without
   the outside pressure?" posed in both "Seasons" and "Camping".
   Being someone who agrees with that view, this works for me.

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[Sailor Moon]

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Title: Crystalbrittle
Series: Sailor Moon
Genre: Dark/Original Setting
Author: Ken Arromdee
Email: arromdee@inetnow.net

Homepage: http://www.inetnow.net/~arromdee/fanfic.html

Date Sent to FFML: July 22, 1998
Size: 33 Kb

Summary:

Middle section of the Crystalbrittle story, showing life in Crystal
Tokyo without a Serenity for a time, as the people learn how to govern
themselves.

{Paul}
   One of the few quirks of time travel is that it's also, potentially,
   travel across parallel realities, to a world where someone from the
   future just happened to pop in one day. Of course, that means the
   world left behind is more or less hosed. And this is what happens
   when, despite every precaution, evil surges back. Though I
   occasionally get the feeling the author is talking through his
   characters, there are certain things that need to be said... and
   the picture of life in a devastated Utopia is definitely close
   enough to reality for my tastes. 16 or 17 out of 20.

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Title: Perfect World, Prologue
Series: Sailormoon
Genre: Darkish/Mystery
Author: Lady Ice
Email: ladyicei@aol.com

Homepage: http://members.aol.com/LdySeitari/serenity.html

Date Sent to FFML: July 22, 1998
Size: 10 Kb

Summary:

Nearly 1,000 years have passed since the defeat of
Crystal Tokyo and Neo-Queen Serenity. Tokyo is
currently in a state of chaos, and the people turn to
the mysterious Sachiko Tsukino, who claims to be
the daughter of Princess Serenity, to lead them into a
new golden age. Meanwhile, another woman claiming to
be related to the royal family begins her search for the
resurrected Sailor Senshi...

{Paul}
   Now this one is... different. It seems almost an understated future
   after the previous piece... and it's only a prologue, so it's a bit
   too difficult to tell if the plot will go somewhere familiar or
   break new ground... but the premise seems very sensible. One
   wonders if Minako merely stepped aside... 9 of 10 on the short
   scale, for this IS a short piece.

* * * * *
[Tenchi Muyo!]

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Title: Onnakeikan
Series: Tenchi Muyo!
Genre: Tragedy
Author: Trakal
Email: Trakal@map.com

Homepage:
http://members.xoom.com/~tanteia

http://members.spree.com/trakal

http://www.geocities.com/tokyo/pagoda/2723 (no updates in a long time. kinda
left it
just hanging after they started using those popups.)

Date Sent to FFML: July 25, 1998

Summary:

The new young wife of the Galaxy Police Commander, herself a mental
reincarnation of the Operative, gives birth to the Operative's physical
reincarnation...
and also to the reincarnation of the greatest evil the universe has ever
known. She knows
the danger and wants to destroy it, but no one will listen to her...
... and the newborn evil won't be a baby forever!

{Shunsuke}
   This has the right amount of buildup to the horror of what the girl 
   gives birth to, but doesn't quite carry it off.  The ending is not 
   really a surprise, and the short length of the story leaves a little 
   out in terms of describing the girl and her personality.  Still, it's 
   an interesting idea, and would be great in a longer story, sort of a 
   "Rosemary's Baby" meets "The Omen". ^_^

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End of the Reviews List for the week of: July 18 - July 24, 1998

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