On Thu, 30 Jul 1998, Gary Kleppe wrote:

That causes problems for the ending of the story, though. I'm not sure
that it would be believable to have Hinako like the oversalted cookies,
and even if it would, it would come off as a deus ex machina.

Any ideas on how to fix this? (Anybody?)

Why not have Kodachi change an *unspecified* ingredient's amount, since
she has to work quickly?  After all, Akane's group isn't going to
obligingly stare at a chocolate chip until Kodachi finds which ingredient
she wants to change.  Then, we later find out that it's the sugar content
that she changed.

Still comes off as a little contrived(she just *happens* to change the
sugar, and Hinako just *happens* to be judging), but it does seem
reasonable.

-Natsume Ranma Ranma
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The sardines weren't worth the trouble.  A few more shots, then 
Ryoga-san would overheat and explode.  Ducking around a corner, 
I managed to lose him as I entered the ramshackle residence of 
my Anime supplier.

One look at his face and I knew that I was betrayed.  "Tell me."
I insisted.  He refused, so I slammed him against the wall.
"Last chance.  Where can Ranma-Ranma find good fanfics?"
"Try Jason Liao." he whispered, before he slumped to the floor.
I heard the sounds of a door splintering as I left through the 
window, one step ahead of Tendo Heavy Industries...