Hey Gary,

I didn't see anything that really needed fixing, so I just threw in a couple
comments as they came to me.  :)

       Something from out of the darkness struck Tatewaki, knocking him
down.

Either Kuno learned nothing in his 5 years with the Amazons, or Kodachi
has improved even more than he has in the missing years... Sure, it's
dark and she can be silent...that's not the point.  <G>

       Kodachi moved effortlessly out of the way of the blow, and was
instantly behind her brother.

He still sucks...

Akane sat in her seat, not hearing much of what
her teacher was saying -- something about conjugal verbs.

^^^^^^^^
Akane's thinking about the match or the near marriage? Or
is this another pun.

       Suddenly, Ranma's eyes opened fully, as he sat straight up.
"I've got it! I know what to do."

Oh, this will be good.  <G>

       Of course, with Nabiki already gone. that would leave Kasumi
alone with Father. Much of her life so far had been spent looking after
her two sisters. What would she do after they were gone? She was still
only twenty-two, young enough to do something else with her life. But
what?
       She had once wondered if Doctor Tofu would ask her to marry him.
But he always seemed to lose his mind everytime he was in her presence.

Should there be a line between the two paragraphs?

Whichever one of you
loses can't be seen around here for the next four years.

Hey, that's not bad.  :)


Nice addition to the series.  I'm wondering what Kodachi has been up to
in the missing years, however.  Ranma and Akane are getting closer and
Ranma's mom is relaxing a bit.  Nice to see a little of that after seeing
stories like Return of the Sisters and Rejection.  <Both of which are
excellent stories.>

Eagerly awaiting HaM part 4!

Warren

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