dhomeric <dhomeric@jps.net> wrote:

These are the new chapters.

A few random comments:

- Please try to word wrap your stuff at 70-80 chrs per line when you send, to
make it easier for people to read.

- Ukyo's (I presume it's Ukyo) accent is way overdone IMO. Transliterated
accents have to be done in moderation, or they sound cheesy.

- The story is good so far, but it still doesn't seem to have gotten past the
introductory stage. You've done a fine job in introducing characters the way
they are in the future; now bring some of them together to interact.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics