Konatsu was above Ukyou, holding onto the ceiling. He worried about how
she was to fair after Ranma died. He was upset that Ranma had died,

...to fare...

Akane became elated. "I can get him back. I've wished to get a second
chance with Ranma..."

This probably needs repghrasing. As I understand it, teh wish needs to
be formally phrased, however accidentally the actual choice of words is.
ie somewhere in there must be teh words 'I wish...'.

Akane's head began to spin. It was Sunday, May tenth, but yesterday was
Tuesday May tenth. Ranma arrived on May tenth... Sunday. "I-is the year
1992?"

Someone tell me if you looked this date up specially ;)

change back into a guy. I had breast and no... um... well ya know."

just the one breast?

to the time when we can break the engagement, we decide to walk down

the

isle. We have a long time before then, so anything could happen."

aisle

"I guess your right. You're sure your old man won't throw us out?"

...you're right.

"As thy wishes. It will be my honor to vanquish this foe for you!"

'As thou doth wish' since you want to use old english
'As is thy wish' could work
'so mote it be' might work here too.
'so be it' also a possibility.

--- 5-8

"You don't know him and you insult him?! Kuno die!" The next thirty
seconds was filled with completely mindless violence Akane enacted on
Kuno's personage.

word order jars a bit here.


---
Rhialto
---
  "That's much better. Now, Gosunkugi, do you remember that little
trinket you sold to me last week?" Kodachi paused for a moment, enjoying
the thrill of creating fear. "No? Then perhaps you remember the little
trinket that you sold to Kodachi, no?"

  Realisation dawned on Gosunkugi's face. "Kodachi?"

  "In the flesh." Kodachi paused a moment and then added, "So to speak.
It's my flesh now. Cute, don't you think?" Kodachi smiled and gave a
little twirl, as if to show off exactly what she possessed.

(from "A Rose")