ShortYes@aol.com wrote:

Making up his mind, Ranma leaped off the roof in search of the one female in
all of Nerima who understood him.  He went looking for Ranko.  Thank goodness
the soul of the girl in question was that of the one who drowned 1500 years
ago and not himslef or else he would truly dispair.

Interesting idea, but the way it's told leaves a lot to be desired. Even
in a short fic, the first law of good writing is show, don't tell. This
would be a lot more effective if we got to see Ranma's interactions with
the four fiancees, and afterwards a conversation with Ranko.

Good job on the synopsis. Now write the fic.



Gary Kleppe <kleppe@execpc.com>
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics.html