Excellent work, and a worthy successor to "The Party." I especially liked the
Ranma/Nodoka conversation; Ranma trying to confide in her while still having to
filter everything through the "Ranko" identity. This was also one of the best
balanced treatments of Nodoka I've seen, letting her be effective as a mother
while not ignoring her... eccentricities.

The last half or so of the fic was set in a double-justify mode. While this
works great for formats where the spacing between words can be varied
continuously, it looks really odd in plain text, so I'd suggest doing it all in
left-justify next time.

Some minor nits: Tendo's indicates something belonging to one Tendo. You should
use Tendos, or Tendos' (the latter indicates something belonging to more than
one Tendo). Also, in one place you wrote "confident" (sure of oneself) when you
meant "confidant" (trusted person).

One more thing, HURRY UP WITH THE NEXT ONE! :-)


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics