Excellent grammar, spelling and writing style. Looks good so far.

I noticed that Akira and Ranma seem to be getting along very badly, even
worse than Ranma and Akane did (just look at the way they fight); just
making an observation here.

Here's an interesting premise that I've never seen done in any "Ranma was
born as a girl" fics: Ukyou's also a girl, Ukyou was engaged to Ranma when
they were little kids, Ranma knew Ukyou was a girl, Ukyou thought Ranma
was a guy, later Ukyou finds out that Ranma is really a girl but STILL
wants to go through with the engagement. :) It would certainly be fun to
see how this turns out.

-Philip Mak (pmak@cs.dal.ca)