Mike Loader wrote:

My yearly piece of mildy grumpy, semi-helpful C&C.

Good side: The writing's fairly tight; no terrible stylistic mistakes.
Fairly good job showing us the scene, and running through events.

Bad side:

   1. This plot (Ranma and Ryouga fight, Ryouga rapes Ranma, Ryouga flees,
    Ranma/Ryouga's kid shows up for revenge) has been done before. A lot.
    In fact, it's been done so often that Nick Liefker parodied it in
    Black Lemonade.

Just once I'd like to see Taro or even Kuno do it instead or (heavy 
panting) Kodachi.  Why does Ryoga always have to be the rapist?  Counter
stereotyping just because he's the least likely of all the characters to 
commit rape?  

   2. Despite the fact that it's been done before, the premise is riddled
    with flaws. First: after the first few volumes, Ranma and Ryouga
    Settle down into a friendly rivalry. Second: you have Ryouga beat
    Ranma 'fairly' (no new technique, etc) which isn't terribly likely.

Yeah but he did give Ryouga lucky breaks.  That's odd of course since 
Ranma is the one who normally gets the breaks, but it's not totally 
unbelievable.  I thought the fight scene was rather quite well written. 
 

    Third: even assuming Ryouga is scummy enough to rape someone, he's
    repeatedly shown disgust at the thought of intimate contact with
    Ranma, to the point of fleeing screaming in disgust after she kisses
    him. 

I don't think it's totally unreasonable.  Rape has a great deal to do 
with establishing dominance.  While he might find a Ranma trying to 
seduce him (or pretending to) to be repellent, a helpless Ranma in 
female form might push totally different buttons.  However I have 
trouble with that Ryouga going on to become a loving husband to Akari.

Fourth: Ranma would hunt him down himself, not wait seventeen

    years for his kid to grow up. 

Ranma is doubtless dead, having committed seppuku.  Pregnancy is not 
manly.  Which would also explain why Ryanko thinks of Ranma as her 
mother rather than her father since a living Ranma would insist on 
having the daughter he gave birth call him "Father" even if he was left 
a bitter, broken man by his rape.

Fifth: Sorry, but I find it hard to

    believe that a 16 year old girl is stronger than a 33 year old Ryouga.

I have a problem with that as well, although she'd be stronger than 
Ranma was, thanks to the Hibiki legacy.  But stronger than Ryoga?  Not 
bloody likely.  Not unless her build was one that could never be 
mistaken for Ranma's female form.  

Logically, when Ryanko takes on dear old dad, the natural result would 
be that Ryoga ties his daughter into a very decorative bow.  He'd be 
more experienced and stronger.  Of course that would be an interesting
way to take the story that you don't see in these vengeance fics.  What 
if the vengeance seeker just loses?  How does Ryoga deal with that?  
Kill his daughter?  Spend all of his time looking over his shoulder for 
the rematch?  Does Ryanko kill Akari when she realises she can't beat 
Ryoga?  Or does she catch a clue and bring a squirt gun?   What if Ryoga 
feels so guilty about what he did that he just surrenders if she'll 
spare Akari?  Of course it would be interesting if Ryoga had a kid of 
his own determined to defend his father from his sister. 

   3. Why does everyone seeking to avenge their father wear a black cloak?
    Is it a fashion statement?

Nobody respects them when they wear chicken suits.  Hmmm...  Could be
a gimmick for "Thy Sideways Cream Pie".  

There is one other issue.  Even Ryoga has trouble accidentally finding 
his way to China.  Putting that aside, how did Ryanko find him so 
easily?  Even if she doesn't have the Hibiki sense of direction, 
following Ryoga is no easy task, particularly without being noticed.