The FFML Synopses List
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For the week of: June 6-12, 1998
Moderator on Duty: Sean Connor
Synopses Submitted: 24
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Note from the reviewers:
Hello to all, and a *BIG* apology on the delay in putting this out; it's
our first time, so please be patient. More than one of us has had ISP
problems (mine was just annoying, Helen's was terminal; she couldn't get
her reviews to us at all). For the four stories we didn't get to, that
omission will be corrected.
Next time should be better. Really.
Collectively yours,
Paul (arezina@acad1.stvincent.edu)
Helen (Helen@eiw-ca.com)
Shunsuke (shunsuke@mailcity.com)
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[Evangelion]
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Title: Sweet Remembrance
Series: Neon Genesis Evangelion
Genre: Romantic Comedy
Author: Sailor Alpha
Email: DarkAlpha2@aol.com (AlphSailor@aol.com will be down fof a while)
Date Sent to FFML: June 6, 1998
Size: 29 Kb
Summary:
It's the 'White Day', and all boys are giving Asuka cards and gifts,
etc., but Shinji debates whether if he should give Asuka something. If he
does, will Asuka accept it or not? Sounds simple enough? Not when Asuka
thinks
Shinji's a pevert!
{Paul}
Hmm... not much I can say about this, since I'm no EVA stickler, but I
didn't really detect any internal inconsistencies. And, like all WAFF
fics,
the characters seem to be on a steady dose of Prozac... but I guess
even
Asuka has her nice days. >>duck<< A few minor grammar and spelling
mistakes
here and there (one wonders exactly how good Asuka's German really
is...)
but nothing to terribly distracting. Read the MiST of this if you
can...
it's the first time I've ever seen existentialist philosophy merged
with
grammar corrections. All in all, I'd give it 12, maybe 13 out of 20.
{Shunsuke}
A good tale showing Asuka's and Shinji's relationship progressing,
although I personally don't see what happens to Asuka as being any more
than what she's used to, more the author's vehicle for leading the
story
to its conclusion. It's still worth a look.
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Title: Angelus Retournen Incarnatus 'The Sacred Life' Chapter 3
Series: Neon Genesis Evangelion
Genre: Alternate Continuity
Author: Florencio B. de la Merced, Jr.
Email: fmerced@pworld.net.ph
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Temple/3641/index.html
Date Sent to FFML: June 3, 1998
Size: 39 Kb
Summary:
Misato wakes up from obscurity, finding out that her friends are alive and
well. She also discovers more secrets about the hidden agenda and about
the
two mysterious twin EVA Unit 01.
{Paul}
Not only an EVA fic but and alternate EVA fic. I don't know the series
well enough to even begin to rate it...
{Shunsuke}
An interesting change of events leads most of the major players
at NERV to go underground because the Angels are no longer the
threat, the EVAs are. Misato has only just been let in on the
secret of what's happening, and her continued participation in
NERV for the past three years may not have been her choosing.
A good idea and alternate end, although I would question some of
the characters actions; I would assume the author will explain
these in future chapters. My only critique would be to ask why
Asuka has not matured in the intervening time given the people
she has been working with and her contact with them.
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[Iczer / Teknoman]
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Title: Operation: Lightsphere
Series: Iczer/Teknoman
Genre: Action/Drama
Author: Andrew Dynon
Email: adyn1@students.latrobe.edu.au
Date Sent to FFML: June 13, 1998
Summary:
"When I Descend...", Part 1 of 2: The final phase of the Rhadam's
invasion of Earth begins, and Blade, Nagisa and the rest head to the moon
to
fight Darkon himself.
{All}
Sorry, this is one of the stories not reviewed; we will attempt to
include them in the next list.
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[Magic Knight Rayearth]
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Title: Reunions and Tragedies Chapter 4: An Archangel's Wrath
Series: Magic Knight Rayearth
Genre: Continuation
Author: Nikholas "elf" F. Toledo
Email: niftol@i-manila.com.ph
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Flats/3145/reunions.html
Date Sent to FFML: June 8, 1998
Size: 45 Kb
Summary:
Gryff unleashes his anger on Lantis, and four on the NSX take
positions to spring. What is the reason for Gryff's vendetta, and will
the magical knights be able to stop them before the sinister plot unfolds?
{All}
Again, this will be reviewed later. Sorry.
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[Original]
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Title: Macho Caballo Chapter 25 - Dog Daze Afternoon
Series: Macho Caballo
Genre: Humor/Drama/Original
Author: James Eades (James and the Bluejay)
Email: jeeades@ix.netcom.com
Homepage: http://www2.netcom.com/~jeeades/macho.htm
Date Sent to FFML: June 7, 1998
Size: 37 Kb
Summary:
While Ramon is in camp happily getting acquainted with his
sister, his friends are in town having adventures of their own.
{All}
>_< Eep. Again.
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[Ranma 1/2]
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Title: Rejected Part 9 & 10
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Dark, Sad, Lemon
Author: Lord Archive
Email: archive@mich.com
Homepage: http://www.mich.com/~archive/anime
Date Sent to FFML: June 6 - 10, 1998
Size: 28 Kb, 21 Kb
Summary:
Part 9 - Ranma returns to school and starts to come to terms with what
happened to his parents and himself.
Part 10 - Akane continues to support Ranma as his emotional wounds heals.
She also discovers she's been denying things she hates and learns that she
has hidden something about herself so deeply she didn't really know about
it.
{Paul}
This may have subconsciously been a response to someone's casual
statement that Ranma turns gay whenever he gets splashed with cold
water.
But knowing Lord Archive, he's had this one in the works for a while.
The
lemon is not so forced as it is sometimes in his Nekoken series... this
and
Ranma .05 and perhaps Kun-chan's series are the notable lemons with
plot in
the Ranmaverse. Of course, these ones are more plot than lemon... and
Lord
Archive does a few really nice things with Ranma's whole debate over
what he
truly is. I can see how Nodoka's insistence on seppuku and her own
vision of
manhood would contradict Ranma's own feelings, and Lord Archive pulls
out
that inner struggle at several notable viewpoints. I'm also interested
to
know exactly where he's going with Shamps and Kuno... 14 or 15 out of
20.
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Title: Vengeance Part Three
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Dark
Author: Ryan Erik
Email: magusbloodstone@hotmail.com
Date Sent to FFML: June 12, 1998
Size: 30 Kb
Summary:
Shampoo finally makes it back to Japan, but she
is too late. Ryouga has already completed his revenge upon
Ranma, but his plan goes very wrong. Shampoo confronts the
lost boy about Ranma's disappearance, but no one sides with
her. So, where is Ranma?
{Paul}
Nasty, nasty dark fic. You want to really nail Ryoga at times for what
he's doing. The imagery is very vivid, and very well-used, and very
detailed. It's cinematic in places... and it feels very real to me. I'd
give
it a 16 or 17 out of 20.
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Title: On Hosipitality
Series: Ranma
Genre: Off the Wall Shortfic
Author: Thomas R Jefferys
Email: wyrm@mail.utexas.edu
Date Sent to FFML: June 7, 1998
Size: 4 Kb
Summary:
Kasumi takes Genma and Ryouga aside for a much needed talk about
being hospitable guests and respecting your hosts' property.
{Paul}
*pfft* *pfft* BAAAAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHAHAH!!! The purpose of shortfic seems
to be to make you laugh or sicken you... this one does a little bit of
both,
but a lot more of the former. A whole lot more. Of course, one wonders
why
Kasumi hasn't told Akane she's sleeping with Ryoga... but hey, it's a
shortfic, what do you expect? 9 out of 10 on the short scale.
{Shunsuke}
And I thought pigs were such clean animals.
Ryouga and Genma take a little scolding for their inability to control
themselves. It's a one-joke story, a little bathroom humour <groan>,
but it's a good laugh, almost as funny as the Ranma shortfic "Lemon".
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Title: Hard To Say Goodbye, chapter 6
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Serious
Author: K-chan
Email: k-chan@rocketmail.com
Date Sent to FFML: June 7, 1998
Size: 25 Kb
Summary:
Nabiki leaves her house very early in the morning. Soon after, she
goes missing and doesn't turn up for school, worrying Akane and Jiki, who
seem to be the only ones who take serious notice of this. In the dead of
night, his questionable sanity failing him indefinitely, Kuno confronts
his
past, unaware of the potentially fatal results...
{Paul}
A few minor grammar points, but nothing too major. Very good use of
third
person limited omniscient narrative. (For those of you who don't
remember,
that's when the author follows the thoughts of a limited number of
characters at once.) It adds a touch of realism to an already
interesting
story. I can feel panic and fear and suspicion and a hint of madness
very
nicely, thanks to the prose, but at times the internal thoughts seem a
bit
odd and forced, especially for Kuno. Of course, his sanity is
questionable... At any rate, this one's a 14 or 15 out of 20.
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Title: A Different Viewpoint pt 29
Series: Ranma
Genre: Continuation
Author: Christopher J. Olsen
Email: tagan1@pacbell.net
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Dojo/1449/
Date Sent to FFML: June 7, 1998
Size: 33 Kb
Summary:
Nabiki has figured out something is wrong. She attempts to correct
things.
{Paul}
That's putting it bluntly. I never knew Gos had such a mean streak.
This
whole series is pretty good, despite the occasional "annoying new
character"
qualities the not-so-annoying new character exhibits. The Nabiki-Tofu
dialogue is one of the better, more mediated forms of exposition I've
seen
in quite a while. I'd give this little installment about 15 or 16 out
of 20.
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Title: Doco in the Battle of the Bands
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Continuation
Author: Razorclaw X
Email: spiceoflife@hotmail.com
Homepage: http://www.crosswinds.net/anaheim/~slythe/ranma/index.html
Date Sent to FFML: June 9, 1998
Size: 30Kb each (7 parts) = 210Kb total
Summary:
As summer vacation settles in Nabiki organizes the gang into
one large band for a battle of the bands to win the grand prize-- but
there's more going on in this competition than meets the eye. Only
together can the band succeed, but considering the members of the group,
that won't be easy....
{Paul}
Okay, first off, I found myself just boggling at the songs. They
probably
scan and sound a lot better in the original Japanese, and they should
have
been left that way, except most of us don't speak or pronounce
Japanese,
so... well, I guess it'd make more sense with the CD at my side, which
is
something I just don't have. Everyone seems a bit too sensible for
Ranma at
times, but the plot is very interesting, to say the least. The whole
series
merits a 17 or 18 out of 20.
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Title: Loveletters from the Edge Chapters 1-9
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Elseworlds / new and funky flavor
Author: Scriviner
Email: ebon@i-manila.com.ph
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Temple/1227/
Size: 300 Kb in all
Summary:
A world where Kodachi is the sweet and delicate flower of Furinkan High
School. Tatewaki Kuno is a shy poet, much beloved by the student body.
Nabiki is the proverbial short tempered violent tomboy. Akane, with a
mercenary's heart and a playful romantic streak a mile wide. Ryouga is
happy
camper. And Ranma is harly shy at all around women. All this from one
significant change. A really significant change.
{Paul}
"I only wish the master and mistress had known a better mother," said
Sasuke Sakugare to no one in particular. And his wish was granted...
And the world would never be the same. This is my favorite Elseworlds
so
far... it combines the romantic-triangle-breaking of "Akane 1/2" with
the
total normality of "In My Life". Who said peace (comparative peace, at
any
rate) was bad for Ranma fanfic? This is a very interesting take on the
entire series, beginning from the odd training trip return in the
beginning
and going on from there. Nabs and Akane have swapped personalities,
Kuno
is... well, the only way to describe him is to go outside the series
and
call him Ikari Shinji with a backbone. Kodachi acts a lot like Kasumi,
at
times, and Ukyo acts like she did during that 10-year special sauce
arc. The
only real glaring flaw in any of the main characters is Nabiki's
violent
streak, a streak which is rapidly fading. All in all, it's a completely
excellent alternate reality, though one can't help but wonder what will
happen when those wacky Amazons show up, if they do. 18, 19, maybe even
20
out of 20.
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Title: Shampoo 1/2 Chapter 28: First Contact
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Alternate Universe
Author: D.B. Sommer
Email: sommer@nb.net
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/~azatlan/Special-Series/shampoo.html
Summary:
Shampoo receives a mysterious visitor while Ranma and Ryouga make
First Contact with the Eight Devils Of Kimone. Minami returns with a cure
for Ai. And Perfume is given charge of a Hunt Squad to bring Shampoo back
to China at any cost.
{Paul}
This is also another good alternate universe, but for different
reasons.
Romantic tension, excellent battles against the supernatural... this is
almost as completely demented as the original Ranmaverse, and that's
what
makes me want to keep reading it. Excellent, excellent job. 18 or 19
out
of 20.
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Title: Haven't we done this before?
Series: Ranma
Genre: Lemon
Author: David A. Tatum
Email: desaix@sysnet.net
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Athens/Acropolis/7872/fanfics.htm
Summary:
Ranma and Akane have sex. What did you expect? It's just a
lemon, after all...
{Paul}
I think this can actually qualify as an IC lemon, difficult as that may
be to believe for Ranma and Akane. No spelling or grammar flames, no
matter
how much you might want your Rabid Grammarian to break the flow of this
story. Definitely not unusual in the setup, definitely unusual in the
execution. 9 out of 10 on the Hentai Meter.
{Shunsuke}
Finally Ranma and Akane are married, Ukyou and Shampoo are spending the
night in the slammer, and everybody has left the dojo. Our two love
birds, reluctant as they are, consummate the marriage on their
honeymoon.
As they...enjoy each other's company, they deal with the issue of duty
versus love.
A standard Ranma fic, even for a lemon, though I have my doubts about
whether the two would be so unreserved in bed; most first timers tend
to be a little shyer.
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Title: Every Attack
Series: Ranma
Genre: Spamfic
Author: David A. Tatum
Email: desaix@sysnet.net
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Athens/Acropolis/7872/fanfics.htm
Summary:
Ryouga watches Ranma and Akane sleep together.
{Paul}
No, this isn't a lemon. It's a bit weirder than that. Anything Goes
Martial Arts Somni-fu at its finest. (That's "sleeping fist" in
Greco-Japanese.) Must be read to be believed, and funny as all get-out.
10 of 10 on the short scale.
{Shunsuke}
Silly, silly, silly...but believable. The idea of conditioned reflexes
and slapstick comedy are brought together in a battle of the sexless
in Akane's bed.
I don't buy the bit about Akane in her sleep dislocating P-chan's leg,
but that's just me. See for yourself.
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Title: Chaos 2: In the Darkness of the Night
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Character Study
Author: Nikholas "Chaos" F. Toledo
Email: niftol@i-manila.com.ph
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Flats/3145/fanfics.html
Date Sent to FFML: June 8, 1998
Size: 5 Kb
Summary:
A small piece of the darkness without, and the light within.
{Paul}
Tiny li'l thing. A few grammar mishaps, a misspelled word here and
there,
awkward tense usage... but a good couple insights into what Kasumi
thinks. 6
or 7 of 10 on the short scale.
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Title: Chaos 3: Atashi no Tenshi
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Character Study
Author: Nikholas "Chaos" F. Toledo
Email: niftol@i-manila.com.ph
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Flats/3145/fanfics.html
Date Sent to FFML: June 8, 1998
Size: 5 Kb
Summary:
Know the ones you love... and the ones that love you.
{Paul}
Another small piece, same problems as the first. An unexpected little
twist at the end, a completely unexplained one if you think about who
normally can pull Akane from the predicament she's describing. 5 or 6
of 10
on the short scale.
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Title: The Leper Interlude
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: New Character, Self-Insertion
Author: Nikholas "NomaD" F. Toledo
Email: niftol@i-manila.com.ph
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Flats/3145/theleper.html
Date Sent to FFML: June 8, 1998
Size: 12 Kb
Summary:
A small scene in the middle of the night at the Ucchan's.
{Paul}
Ryoga and Ukyo! Ukyo and Ryoga! Shades of 'The More Things Change',
only
less, much less, violence in the budding relationship. Pure
conversation,
interrupted only when it has to be. A nice, quiet little interlude...
but
one wonders about Akari... oh wait, this is anime continuity... never
mind.
16 or 17 out of 20.
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Title: The Leper Part 8: The Calm Before...
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: New Character, Self-Insertion
Author: Nikholas "NomaD" F. Toledo
Email: niftol@i-manila.com.ph
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Flats/3145/theleper.html
Date Sent to FFML: June 8, 1998
Size: 31 Kb
Summary:
Kiiroi's gambit: can he make amends? Ukyou reads a letter,
and Nabiki wishes for divine intervention. The plot unravels, along
with some clothes, and wound-up feelings...
{Paul}
Nice plot on the Nabster's part. Very nice. The story as a whole has
kind
of a light romantic haze about it... but that's a good thing. Lots of
dialogue, and some passages crafted to entrap the ecchi among us. A few
tiny
grammar quirks here and there, enough to merit only a 15 or 16 out of
20. A
warm and fuzzy moment should NOT be shattered by the Rabid Grammarian.
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Title: Wedding Night
Series: Ranma 1/2
Genre: Lime
Author: Bridget E. Wilde
Email: wildeman@psn.net
Homepage: http://www.psn.net/~wildeman
Date Sent to FFML: Saturday, June 13, 1998
Size: 45 Kb
Summary:
After the failed wedding, Ranma and Akane have a rendezvous in the
Tendo Dojo, with unexpected results...
{Paul}
What can I say? It's good. Great imagery and symbolism, great plotting,
great dialogue, great thoughts... 20 out of 20. I've read this about 10
times and it hasn't gotten any less good.
{Shunsuke}
Ranma is outside in the middle of the night cleaning up the dojo
after the failed wedding. Akane wakes up to find him there, and
goes out to talk with him where they have a heart-to-heart about
themselves and their relationship.
I don't know "page 179 of manga volume 38, between panels 1
and 2", so I can't say about IOC/OOC, but as for the rest...
Pleasant, a little surprising (the hentai bit, anyway, I didn't
expect that) and romantic. I guess I was waiting for the
inevitable interruption by somebody. ^_^
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[Ranma 1/2 / Chronicles of Amber]
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Title: Lost Boy of Amber part3:Excursions and Voyeurs
Series: Ranma 1/2 & Chronicles of Amber
Author: C.J.
Email: cj@stny.lrun.com
Date Sent to FFML: June 7, 1998
Size: 11.3 Kb
Summary:
Ryoga finds out more about his Amber heritage, and people lurk in
the background. Plus, a cameo by Chris Angel, God of Moments.
{All}
>_< Last missed fic.
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[Ranma 1/2 / Evangelion]
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Title: How long, my love?
Series: Ranma/ Evangelion
Genre: X-over, Comedy/ Drama
Author: PHOOsun
Email: stroma@globalnet.co.uk
Date Sent to FFML: June 7, 1998
Size: 16 Kb
Summary:
Whilst fighting an Angel, EVA 00, 01 and 02 disappear along with
the Angel. Meanwhile...
...Ranma is having a very bad day, he's just fallen in the cursed spring
of
drowned girl. A few minutes later three large visitors arrive.
Caution: Standard Evangelion-canon is ignored in favour of an
author-generated one.
{Paul}
And a good caution. This, I think, would be better left as a spamfic.
Too
many loose ends to tie up or even think about... too many brand-new
innovations and such. About a 12 out of 20, simply because I found
myself
asking "Do you believe this, even for a moment?" and answering "Yeah
right."
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[Ranma 1/2 / Oh My Goddess!]
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Title: The Adventures of Mousse - GOD OF THUNDER!
Part 4: The Female of the Species
Series: Ranma 1/2 and Oh My Goddess!
Genre: Crossover
Author: Nikholas "Rain Man" F. Toledo
Email: niftol@i-manila.com.ph
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Flats/3145/advmus.html
Date Sent to FFML: June 4, 1998
Size: 44 Kb
Summary:
The story continues as Mousse gets into the groove. With
a new designation, a new sigil, and almost a new life, he begins his
new job... where?! Oh, well... there's always forever... do you think
that the Almighty would phase out females? (And what about goddesses?)
{Paul}
Most impressive. I wonder what happened to parts 1 and 2? ;> But
anyway,
duck-boy is coming out as every bit the confused, lovesick, and
genuinely
himself person I know and love him as. I'd have to give this one about
16
or 17 out of 20.
{Shunsuke}
Mousse turns out to be the god of thunder (what?! not Kuno?) and
secrets, and is being shown the ropes by Urd. Things are necessarily
as they seem, however, as Urd has an agenda and Belldandy's got a
history with him. One of Mousse's tasks is to grant wishes, and
based on the criteria, it's...well, who do you think is most deserving
in the Ranmaverse? O_-
Certainly fits well, and the characterization of Mousse is really
accurate...plus, I just *loved* what happened to Cologne. ^_^
* * * * *
[Ranma 1/2 / Reboot]
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Title: Wild Boot Pt 2
Series: Ranma / Reboot
Genre: Fusion
Author: Rarstarr
Email: djfarr@ihug.co.nz
Homepage: http://www.ihug.co.nz/~djfarr/
Date Sent to FFML: June 7, 1998
Size: 40 Kb
Summary:
The Tendo sisters get a message from their father explaining his
disappearance.
Ranma, Akane and Nabiki get trapped in a game called "Alien Hunt" where
they
meet a new sprite.
{Paul}
This is one of the weirder fusions I've had to read, but it's good.
Really interesting, has a little bit of comedy relief that's much
needed
after the "Aliens"-esque scene in the elevator, and you have to wonder
about
the lost AI-boy... 10 out of 10 on the originality scale, 17 or 18 out
of 20
overall.
{Shunsuke}
Our heroes are stuck in a game cube after their fathers abandoned
them to run off somewhere. (Probably to the H picture archives....)
Inside the game, Ranma, Akane, Nabiki and the binomes try to win
against the user when they meet an AI sprite: RyoGA. Is he a help
or a hindrance? Does he know what he is? Can the author tell me
when the next part is coming?
A nice combination of two disparate storylines; Ranma as a Guardian
I can believe. It works even better when you remember that Michael
Donovan plays not only Ryouga, but also Phong, Mike The TV, and Cecil
the bartender on ReBoot. ^_^
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[Sailor Moon]
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Title: Moon Queen Magic: Prologue
Series: Sailor Moon
Genre: Continuation
Author: DragonBard
Email: dragonbard@hotmail.com
Date Sent to FFML: June 6, 1998
Size: 19 Kb
Summary:
This story is in two parts. Part one gives a brief history
of the world before the Silver Millenium. The second part has Sailor
Pluto and and new character called Archon attempt to revive and redeem
the four Generals of the Dark Kingdom/Negaverse.
{Paul}
It's an interesting concept... parts of it seem directly lifted from
Sailormoon Z, though. The execution is rather novel, but the
introduction of
the new characters leaves a bit to be desired. And I don't see why the
author chose to mix and match and occasionally misspell terms from the
Japanese and NA series... 9 out of 10 on the "what happens next" scale,
11
or 12 out of 20 overall.
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Title: Moon Queen Magic: Chapter 1
Series: Sailor Moon
Genre: Continuation
Author: DragonBard
Email: dragonbard@hotmail.com
Date Sent to FFML: June 6, 1998
Size: 23 Kb
Summary:
This chapter is in two parts. the first part is a history of
the Silver Millenium, focusing on the time just prior to its
destruction. In the second part, the Sailor Scouts are bothered by the
mysterious appearance of four people whom they believe to be from the
Silver Millenium Earth Kingdom. Also, they have their first meeting
with Archon.
{Paul}
Yet another pseudo-unexpected twist. I've never seen the Senshi as
mages
before... I want to thump the author for even thinking about putting in
"Sailor Earth", in whatever incarnation, and the occasional grammar
flame or
continuity glitch throws me off a bit, but it's still an interesting
story... even if the prologue, again, seems to be just a summary of a
few
parts of Sailormoon Z... This one's about 12 or 13 out of 20.
- - - - -
Title: Terrible Things To Waste: Part 2
Series: Sailor Moon
Genre: Action/Suspense
Author: Bastion
Email: bastion@ix.netcom.com
Homepage: http://www.ctd.nwu.edu/~aerdnahu/ae.htm
Date Sent to FFML: June 10, 1998
Size: 34 Kb
Summary:
Interdimensional time travellers plot against
each other putting the Sailor Scouts in the middle.
{Paul}
Yes, but WHY are they in the middle? Why the Scouts at all? Interesting
story nonetheless, but I suppose it's a result of millions of such
fanfics
that make me wonder why such a search could connect with one particular
reality... and one particular offshoot of that reality. I've seen
"Haruka"
ported over as Eric/Erica and Alex (don't ask me where THAT came
from)...
and there are a few tiny grammar mistakes and some places where I think
a
little more pacing would make the story a better read. But all in all,
it's
about a 14 or 15 out of 20.
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[Tenchi Muyo!]
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Title: Aeka
Series: Tenchi Muyo!
Genre: Poem
Author: BGlanders
Email: BGlanders@aol.com
Summary:
Short poem from Aeka's POV.
{Paul}
As a pure poem... heck, this needs a lot of work. Uneven meter,
repeated
words to rhyme, misspellings, cliches... poetry is condensed and most
especially purified language, or is intended as such... afraid I'm
going to
have to give this one only a 3 out of 10 on the short scale.
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Title: The Gentle Sound of Thunder Ch. 5-A: Conversations...
Series: Tenchi Muyo!
Genre: Darkfic
Author: BGlanders
Email: BGlanders@aol.com
Summary:
We see conversations between Washu and Sasami about her sister's
death, and Ryoko has a conversation with...Aeka?! This chapter answers
what
happened to Ryoko between ch. 5 and 6.
{Paul}
Dark is right... but this is GOOD dark, y'hear? It's not
dark-for-no-reason, it's resolution that happens to be dark... and this
tries to at least assuage the darkness a little bit. Very true to the
characters, as far as I know them... a few almost perfect moments of
understanding or comfort, elegantly simple images... and a lot of
explaning,
for those of you who wanted loose ends tied up. 17 or 18 out of 20.
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Title: You Were Everything to Me
Series: Tenchi Muyo!
Genre: Touchy Feely
Author: BGlanders
Email: BGlanders@aol.com
Size: About 4-5 Kb.
Summary:
Tenchi sees a side of Noboyuki he had almost forgotten.
{Paul}
"Almost"? Try "completely". This is tiny, but beautiful in its
simplicity. If not for the rampant spelling errors, this would be 10 of
10
on the short scale... as it is, it's 8 of 10.
{Shunsuke}
A *real* short fic, but delves deeply into Tenchi's relationship with
his father, Nobuyuki. We get to see a side of the old man as he was
in _TM! In Love_, but this time father to son. Quite nice, and prone
to leave lumps in your throat.
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And thus ends this week's fanfiction summaries.
{Paul}
And my reviews...
Why the "of 20"? Simple. I needed something broader to base the larger
works on. Shortfics and lemons are out of 10, because there's not much
I'm
willing or able to work with...
That's my opinion... what's yours?
{Shunsuke}
Grovelling time...give us time, we'll get better, I promise! First
time through is always going to be the worst.
Thanks for reading.
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