On Sun, Jun 21, 1998 at 01:42:32AM -0700, Brian wrote:

"Hello, Mousse.  How are you today?"  I say, my voice dripping with
cuteness.

"Why Akane Tendo, what are you doing here?"

And I own him.

Well, I must admit that I never could figure out why all those guys at
Furinkan were fighting over Akane at the beginning of the series --
I guess this explains it. :)

Hmmm...  A lot of problems technically, though.  Most of the general
comments I made while prereading A Wish Come True apply here as well --
choppy sentences, awkward sentence construction, apostrophe errors, etc.

Otherwise, an excellent alternative explanation of things, although you
might want to delve a little more deeply into why she pretended not
to be interested in Ranma.

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  -Sean Connor (sec@frodo.com) (sec@softhome.net)
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