Some points that occurred to me when I read this story - 


At 09:26 PM 6/15/98 -0400, KaraOhki wrote:

THE PRESENCE OF EVIL
by June "KaraOhki" Geraci

"PREGNANT?"

Kuno's eyes nearly popped from his head.  Akane saw his reaction, and
immediately began to cry.

"I'm sorry, Ta-chan.  I just found out this morning.  I thought about. .
I thought about not having it, but I can't kill my baby.  I'd never be
able to live with myself."

Akane sniffled, and wiped her eyes.

"If you want to call off our wedding, I'll understand."

Kuno didn't hesitate to gather Akane into his arms.

"It's all right, Akane-chan.  I'll raise it as if it were mine.  And he
or she will have plenty of brothers and sisters."

Akane closed her eyes and nestled closer to Kuno, the last of her fears
behind her.

  I saw this one coming.  It was just too obvious a development.

*****

Dr. Tofu's last patient left the clinic, and he locked the door.  He
took off his glasses, rubbed his eyes, and replaced them.

Akane Saotome had visited him that morning, and he'd diagnosed her
pregnancy.  At first, she'd refused to believe him, and then she had
become quite hysterical.

Akane had insisted that she could not, and would not have Ranma's child.
It had taken the doctor quite a while to calm her, and then to convince
her to re-think that decision.  Reminding her that the child was not
only his, but hers, had been the way to do it.  He would have preferred
to simply plant the idea in her mind, but to risk discovery now was too
dangerous.

Tofu took off his shirt, opened the closet, and pulled out a set of
weights.  He began to work out, watching himself in the mirror.  He had
let himself get a little soft, but the last few weeks of workouts had
caused an improvement.

He continued to exercise, until his body glistened with sweat.  Keeping
busy like this helped him to be patient, because for now all he could do
was wait.  He had to wait, and watch, until his child was born.  The
child who would help him fulfill his plans.

He smiled again.  There was plenty of time.

This cliche where the evil spirit takes over someone else is overdone and
tiresome.  I don't like it movies and TV shows, I don't like it here.  It
may have been effective when it was first used, but now it is so common
that the originality is not using it.

Otherwise, not a bad fanfic.  Ranma pretending to have a curse as a tactic
was a particularly clever idea.  I would like to see the magic more
integrated with the martial arts, and some better idea as to why Ranma
became so warped by learning the magic.  You also need to work on his
"evilness".  The Ranma of "Ill Met By Starlight" is creepier, although he
does not use black magic.  

Since the Tendo-Saotome agreement was just that a Saotome was to marry a
Tendo, why would Akane and Kuno have to keep their relationship a secret?
Soun has two other unattached daughters.   

                                                               dml