"KaraOhki" <karaohki@snet.net> wrote:

Genma either couldn't or wouldn't hear his son, and continued to flail
about wildly.  Ranma attempted to duck under his father's arms, slipped
on the ice, and was swept completely off his feet by his father's arms.

Akane watched in horror as Ranma flew forward, hit his head on the ice,
and sank.

                             *****

When they'd pulled Ranma from the pond, he wasn't breathing.  A huge
lump was forming on his head, and it was evident that he'd taken in a
lot of water.  Akane immediately began to work on her husband, breathing
a prayer of thanks that she'd taken a first aid course.  Genma sat
there, shivering, and Nodoka poured hot water on him and her son to
change them back.

This part kinda stretched the believability a bit. Ranma's taken worse
punishment than this, and he'd always been completely healed after about
three panels. Not a really big problem, but you might want to think
about finding an alternate explanation for why he was in the coma.

Overall, this was a nice WAFFy Ranma and Akane story (though it didn't
do much for most of the other characters). I enjoyed it very much!


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics