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The writing is good, and the story certainly flows well enough to keep
one's attention. The treatment of Ranma and Akane is good, considering
that this is intended to be a WAFF-ish fic. The only complaint I have is
the one-dimensional way in which the supporting characters are handled.
Except for Kasumi, they pretty much come off as complete jerks. I think
that's selling them short.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics