At 06:28 PM 5/25/98 -0700, you wrote:

"What if Ukyou really *had* been a boy?"

http://www.io.com/~hcobb/anime/fanfic/nnfr.html

	Henry J. Cobb	hcobb@slip.net          http://www.io.com/~hcobb
   P.S.  Thanks for the plug!

You're welcome. :)

I just started reading the fic, and I've got a couple comments on the style
(assuming it stays fairly constant), if you're interested.

Main thing, it seems too cold and impersonal.  Where Ukyou splashes the
water on her face - it was just so...well, so nothing, really.  It really
gets the reader more involved in the story if you make it more personal and
delve into the characters' emotions.

I'll have more comments after I finish. :)

Hunter Kid
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    The slender girl, Ryako, only gave him a cute, yet somewhat wolfish,
grin.  "Aw, you're no fun, Ryoga," she said, hitting him on the shoulder
playfully.  "Here we are, so close, and you won't let me read what you're
writing?"  She snuggled up against him, smirking to herself.
    Ryoga apparently didn't notice that she was only kidding, because his
face glowed a bright red and he nervously inched away from her.  "C-close?"
 He stammered.  "I...well...you see..."   
			 			-from Ryoga 1/2, chapter 11
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