Well ... it's a bit of a disappointment not seeing any of the familar
SF-faces yet, but I guess that'll come. With the "powerlevel" you're
giving them, they'd probably be overmatching Ranma a bit (for the
record, I disagree slightly with this; I'd place the skills and
power of our hero a bit higher, but you're free to your own opinion).

The multiple periods you're constantly using are highly irritating
and almost made the fic unreadable. *Please* restrain yourself to
correct punctuation.

I don't personally enjoy reading fights all that much (though I do
tend to write them a bit too eagerly), but there are those that do;
I can't comment on the accuracy of the martial arts depicted, but
I'm sure there are many who can.

Beyond that, there's not really much to say yet. I would probably
have made Ranma a bit more uncertain about whether missing Akane
is a good thing or not, but his shouting is on mark. He might even
not want her to come because he's afraid for her, not that he'd
reveal it.

Chapter Two: "Akane's First Fight" is in the planning stages right
now.. I might be bringing in more characters from the Ranma 1/2 world
as Street Fighters (Shampoo and Mousse and maybe Ukyou and the Kunos..
would be good bets..) this will be an ongoing saga until I decide it's
not worth writing anymore. and Yes.. the minions of Shadoloo will make
an appearance coming up sometime soon..

I do think putting more Ranma'ers as streetfighters might not be all
that good an idea. Sure, there's a good reason for Ranma to join the
circuit, but the others? It could easily become a bit farfetched.

Good luck with the next chapter, anyway!

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