Subject: Re: [FFML] [Ranma]
From: "Thomas Schmidt" <Tschmidt@mailgate.tcon.net>
Date: 5/21/1998, 8:36 PM
To: ffml@fanfic.com


Hello ^.^ This being my first post (and second day on this thing) you'll have
 to excuse my dumb-ness. ^.^;; Anyway, heres my story. C&C welcome, but pwease
 dont flame me horribly, I jus' a baby ^.^

Ryoga's Secret

Well, this wasn't too bad; the writing was fine and you only had a couple of 
grammatical mistakes ("I'm" has an apostrophe in it.)  The big problem with the 
fic is that it has a cookie-cutter plot; I've read a hundred Ranma continuations 
just like this.  If you haven't got an original idea, you're going to need 
extraordinary execution, and you don't have either here.  But keep writing, and 
I'll look forward to seeing what else you come up with.



Thomas Schmidt
Tschmidt@tcon.net 
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