Bert Miller wrote:

 "Wow." Yuka stared wide-eyed at the chaotic scene. "You usually
don't see this many of them together on a Wednesday."

I liked this touch.

"P-chan!" Akane exclaimed joyfully as she looked down at the black
piglet who was climbing out. "How did you get here? Come to Mommy!"

 Daisuke smirked at Hiroshi. "Bet she'll kill him when she finds out."

This was good, too - the idea that Ryouga = P-Chan is so obvious that even
Daisuke and Hiroshi know it, but Akane still doesn't.

Mousse-Cologne : Plausible, but not interesting.  New to me.  The
explanation for keeping it secret seemed contrived.  I'm not sure the drug
was required; you could have used hitherto-unrevealed consequences of
Mousse's upbringing.

Hey if you make the camera blurry enough, anyone looks good.  

Kodachi-Nabiki : Plausible, interesting.

Tatewaki-Kasumi : More serious treatment than 'Nameless Sequel'.
Plausible, but overlong.  I agree with a few of the other comments; this
pairing should be explored more.

Nodoka-Kouchou : TRULY demented.  Congratulations!

Akane-Ryouga   : Frighteningly plausible, the way you wrote it.

Ukyou-Gosunkugi : Almost as demented as Nodoka-Kouchou, but the explanation
of Ukyou's revenge, culminating in the image of Ranma running after Ukyou's
car yellng "you said you'd take me with you", was VERY plausible, and
frightening.  I agree with other comments, though, that Gosunkugi's reasons
need exploring also.

Actually it is almost a pity.  He should have written and released 
_that_ story first.  It would have been a great twist ending.  The shock 
value is greatly lessened, given that this Ukyo (like just about all the 
others) isn't going to get what she wants.

Ranma-Shampoo : Good.  Not enough people seem to get these two together,
even for fun.  I don't think the Jusenkyo-period explanations were
required, though good; all you had to do was make Ranma act like any normal
16 year old boy confronted by a willing beautiful woman, instead of the
Takahashi purified-of-lust version.  Ranma's motives for secrecy are

I'm inclined to agree.  It would make perfect sense for Ranma to succumb
and then cover it up.  (It just isn't all that plausible that Ranma 
could do anything and have it remain unknown).  However that way would 
be less complicated, and complication appears to be virtue in this fic.

 good,

but is willingness to please Ranma really strong enough to keep Shampoo
from taunting her rivals?

She may in fact feel no animosity toward her "rivals".  After, she won 
before the game even started.  
 

Soun & Genma : Why would they bother to keep this a secret?  And where Soun would probably be embarassed about it.  Don't know what Genma's 

problem would be.  Say...maybe they should be watching...oh...Sailor 
Moon instead.  

is

Happosai?  He'd CERTAINLY be watching with them.  Of course, if Happosai
*IS* with Tarou...  Maybe a threesome?  Tarou/Happosai/Rouge?  Think what
you could do with six arms...

Bert