From: Ranma Al'Thor
Date: Thursday, May 07, 1998 12:17 PM

But why would he teleport to another universe if he's looking for
Madoka?  I'd think he would be more likely to teleport to her house
in HIS universe, even running on blind instinct.

Well, keep in mind he's confused because of the drugs, and is in a state of
sheer panic.

This is actually better justified than the instances in the manga where he
time travels or goes to alternate universes.  Those events are triggered by
things like tripping down the stairs or falling down an open manhole cover.
The story where he meets this version of parallel-Madoka begins with Kyosuke
riding a roller coaster with Hikaru.  During one of the roller-coaster's
dips, he simply vanishes and ends up in a parallel universe.

So if we use the manga as a reference, his trips to other universes are
triggered reflexively by sheer panic.  That's certainly the situation he
finds himself him in my story.

Hikaru was mostly drawing a blank, although the name sounded familiar.
"Who's Kazuya?"

Hasn't she met the brat?

Yes, which is why the name sounds familiar.  But it's been several years,
and she only met him a couple of times, so it's easy for her to forget.

Beneath the ice and granite loomed
the women *he* knew as Madoka.

woman

D'oh!

Ayukawa was sitting opposite, reading a book.  She didn't seem to be

doing

a good job of it; she hadn't turned the page in ten minutes.

Where did she get a new book if society has broken down to the point where
she had to organize an armed raid to get food?

It's not a new book.  She's re-reading an old book.  You can catch passages
of it in her thoughts.

One time he had been able
to communicate with Ayukawa from outside the school building when she'd
been held captive inside.

His pyschic abilities change in another universe?  Any particular reason?

<shrug>  Ask the manga artist.  He decided that in this universe, Kyosuke
could read minds.

In case you haven't guessed it, much of the KOR manga is poorly written.
I've ranted on this before, but so many of the stories are nothing more than
poor sitcom scripts, where every unlikely thing happens to enable the thin
plot to continue stumbling along.  No *reason* is given for Kyosuke having
different abilities, or why he still had ESP and his "sisters" didn't.  One
could invent a theory about different physical laws in the alternate
universe that would affect how his Power works.

Oh, and I liked the story with parallel-Madoka.  Part of my reason for
writing this is because I was upset on how she was treated - Kyosuke rescued
her, she admits that she likes him, and he teleports back to his home
universe without replying.  That *had* to be a huge slap-in-the-face for
parallel-Madoka.

Asleep, Madoka could resist him as she never could while

That's odd.  I'd think it would be more the other way.

Hey, it's a rationalization!  :)   I'm trying to think of a better one.

Looks okay, although I honestly don't see why Kyosuke jumped into the
other universe instead of just instinctively teleporting inside his own.

Hopefully explained above.

John Walter Biles

Thanks for the comments, John.  ^_^

-Richard