Paul M. Arezina wrote:
Yeah. Like I pointed out in my C&C of your latest work, Lawson-san,
the
human mind tends to react adversely to That Which Should Not Be.
People
appearing out of thin air definitely falls under that heading.
As I said to Lawson, I guess I just didn't think of this. Perhaps
Ishould have.
Speaking of which, have YOU ever MiSTed anything, Lawson-san? Then
again,
writing a story and riffing said story are two entirely different
things...
I think.
Unlike some others, I don't object to MST'ing. I recognize thatreplies,
any replies, are a treasured response for fanfic writers...:-)
|"Although" implies a contrast here, but I think it's *because* the
|building is old that there's a feeling of tradition. "A palpable
feeling
|of tradition seems to emanate from the old building."
Or perhaps he meant "Although the building is NOT old"... seen several
fics
which had that problem with negation.
Lawson actually has this one. I was modelling it after the
UTexas/Austinband hall I spent many a long time while in school...
|> Kasuga: [To Kimura.] Th-that's very impressive.... So you're
|> really good at math?
|
|Kimura: Nope, I just read that off of a bubblegum wrapper.
Explains why she didn't just convert the thing into polar coordinates
and
just integrate from 0 to 2*pi in both cases.
Vlad! Help me out! (Vlad wrote the math stuff; he's proventons better
than I am at stuff like this...
|> [Cut to the dance floor. The artificially-generated steam
|> mixes with the pulsing colored dance floor lights to create
|> an atmosphere of unreality.
|
|Cool. I wanna go there.
I dunno... then again, this IS KOR, and the unreal isn't nearly as
likely to
leap out and tear a chunk off your body. Probe your mind, yes.
Correct; I model KOC after KOR. The universal rules ofKOR apply to KOC
(no tentacles ready to pounce).
|> Kasuga slowly wanders towards the edge of the floor, where
|> couples come on and off.
|
|<Richard coughs a few times.>
|
|I'd, er, just eliminate that last part of the sentence altogether.
|"...Kasuga slowly wanders towards the edge of the dance floor."
Or perhaps change the verb. But the fact that everyone's getting off
here is
sort of important. The dance floor is raised? lowered? fenced? and
there's
no other place to leave it. It makes it that much more likely for him
to
spot someone in particular.
I was envisioning that the dance area was a step raised from the club
floor.
|Looking forward to more from you guys. :)
That goes double for me.
I'm noting a trend... multi-part continuation fics which take place in
a
completely new setting (i.e. college) with a completely updated cast
of
characters. So, which came first, KOR or DNR?
KOC by a long shot. We started waay back in 1993.
What you're seeing here is our "V2" project. For example, if you want
to, you can go to our home page (see my sig) and see that in
actuality, we're up to #33 officially (#34 is almost ready).
V2 is an attempt by me to go back and clean up, improve,
tighten and otherwise improve the writing. Substantially,
the plot is pretty much the same ( but I may change that
around #5-6...:-( ).
Stephen Tsai
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