It's not a bad story.  However, the story is rushed and we never get to see
any of the Tendos.  But I am puzzled.  Why did you use Ranma character
names?  There is little similarity between the Ranmaverse characters and
those if the same name in the fic.  With minor alterations you could have
used other anime series because this fic is not really a fic.  It is an
original story with some characters who share the same names as those in a
popular manga/anime series by Rumiko Takahashi.

                                                                          dml