"Aubry Thonon" <athonon@itds.com> wrote:

On 28 Apr 98 at 19:18, Ronny Hedin wrote:

	Ranma looked back with an innocent expression as the two receded
down the street. The man who just couldn't say no to a woman --
especially not one who's offering free food.

Technically, it should be "one who *was* offering".

Technically, "who's" is a contraction for both "who is" and "who 
was".  Which is why it is generally recommended to writer that they 
do not use contractions except in character speeches.

I don't think that's a very good recommendation, personally. Tends to
make the narration sound over-formal. When I say "who's" I always mean
"who is." Ronny was correct that there was an error there.

	Except that it wasn't all the time. Every time Akane had been
fed up and ready to just end her relationship with Ranma, he'd go and
surprise her by doing something nice. And every once in a while, a

had been - go; Doesn't fit together there.
"had been - he'd went and surprised", but that sounds way Bad.

"..he would go and.." Vs "...he would went and..."  I don't know - 
the first sounds better to me.

The first is correct. However, "he'd" could mean "he had" or "he would,"
and I think that's what confused the issue there.

	Now it seemed Ranma's bird couldn't escape from its cage. Or
maybe it was worse than that. Fear gripped her as she remembered a
simple biological fact. Cats *ate* birds.

*That* was a highly neat trick.

Although "biological" is probably the wrong word.  I'm not quite sure 
of the proper word, though...  "natural"?  nope.  
"law-of-the-jungle"?  worse.

Will think about this.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics