Okay, thanks for all the C&C on my fic.  I'm rewriting the first part. 
Some people have expressed the opinion that I should lose the intro. 
::shrugs:: I kinda liked the old "mysterious voice from beyond"
explanations, but, I'm writing this not only for myself, but for other's
enjoyment.  So... what d'y'all think?  Should I ditch it or what?
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Brian A.H.