I have to agree with Jason, just telling the original story with out expanding or
changing it , isn't really accomplishing anything.
 I also agree that I like most of your stuff. The only thing I haven't liked was
the reason for this series, I wasn't offended by the fact that God did it only
that He wouldn't have a better reason than sheer boredom.
 On the other hand I like that you are not leaving your character much knowledge
of the show, I will admit leaving him SOME knowledge would help the series, if
only in minor matters, which wouldn't make a real difference.
 I did like the bit about how the kid didn't know what she was, that was a
different interpretation from what I got from watching the episode ( in dubbed
version)
 I am looking forward to Largo and the "sexaroids" episodes as they are the ones
most people would like to change. If you are doing the earlier episodes to build a
character base that would be useful but I still think some minor changes would
more effective in telling the story a little more than you had in this episode but
still not a major change. Maybe if the they had talked to the girl in this one and
built some kind of relationship. Oh well your story, your choices.
--
Rick Robinson
RICHARDROBINSONJR@prodigy.net

  I am an almost extinct breed, an  old-fashioned gentleman-
 which means I can be a cast-iron son-of-a-bitch, when it suits me.

              Jubal Harshaw
   As Reported by
   Robert A. Heinlein