Coutuva <coutuva@vecdev.com> wrote:

Based on responses to the original Part Two, I did this one up to see how it
would fly.

I told you how much I liked the original Part 2. Quite frankly, I didn't
think this one was nearly as good. I don't mind a tragic story, but what
Ranma did just struck me as utterly pointless. His running away didn't
do anything to help Junko, nor would it prevent any future Junkos.
Furthermore, why did Akane and the others just let him leave without
trying to find him? I think if Ranma managed to get himself Lost, Akane
would be doing everything she could to find him.

One last thing...

	Akane looked up at the clock, a small smile crossing her
face.  Reaching up, she gathered her hair back into it's familiar
ponytail and tied it back with the red ribbon she had left on

ITS!!! ITS!!! "It's" is ONLY for the contraction "it is!!!!"

If I had a nickel for everytime I've seen people make this mistake in an
otherwise great story, I'd have... several nickles. :-)


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics