David Johnston <rgorman@telusplanet.net> wrote:

This one was tougher since the
reality is starting to develop more differences.  Did it
work?  Should I cut some of the talk?

Cut some of the talk?  IMO, I dont' really see a need to.  The dialogues
are fine; in fact, I find that I'm actually reading the parts where Kuno
is going off on his tirades.  (Which could be both good and bad -- good
because the dialogue is very amusing and similar to what we'd expect from
Kuno, but bad because it's not as nonsensical as we'd expect from Kuno. 
Err, get it?).  

Other than that tiny point, I can't see anything else that really sticks
out as a problem.  The way in which you're seperating "The Way We
Weren't" from the rest of the fics that just borrow the plot from the
original series and stick in new characters is refreshing. Make sure you
don't fall into the trap of just reversing the Tendou and Saotomes'
genders but then leaving their personality alone.  There's bound to be
some distinctions between a male Kaji and a female Kasumi, a male Nikkei
and a female Nabiki, etc.  But I definitely like what I've read so far,
and I look forward to more chapters...

Hmm, one last question.  What's up with Akira and his questions about
Nodoka-san's cursed horse form?  Does he have some sorta weird "riding
the horse" fetish?  Hmm, weird boy...  Ja.

doKuSHInsHA
Member of the #AAS#: Achika Appreciation Society

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