David Johnston <rgorman@telusplanet.net> wrote:

This one was tougher since the
reality is starting to develop more differences.  Did it
work?  Should I cut some of the talk?

Nah, the talk's fine. The only thing that struck me as a little off
(besides "it's eyes") was the coincidence of so many different relevant
characters showing up at once in the same park. Overall, quite a nice
job of writing.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics