The writing on this was pretty rough. The prose didn't flow very well,
and much of the dialog didn't seem natural. If you're going to continue
it, I'd suggest going through and rewriting.

The storyline has a lot of potential. It would be interesting to see
Ranma try to adapt to life in a future that he doesn't understand
anything about, all the while having to deal with the same sorts of
problems that he had left behind, as well as meet up with his old
friends. I'm surprised the wishing thing had to send him forward in time
to screw up his wish. It would've been easier just to turn the whole
gang into happy Stimpy-esque idiots.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics