*grin* *GRIN* Damn, the more I read of this series the more I love it.
And considering I was hooked after only the first part of the series, you
can be sure it's a great one. For all those unfortunate souls who
haven't had a chance to read Donny's series, make sure you do so!! He
must have inadvertently forgot to put his homepage url on the post, so
I'll provide it for him. It's
<http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Ginza/4537/>
Make sure you go and check out the past chapters; it's well worth your
time. Onto the C&C!!
Like Anand-san, I've been waiting for a preludes that included
Setsuna-sama. She's ALWAYS the mysterious senshi of the group, and not
too many people seem to include her in their stories. I know you've
alluded to her and Ranma being together before in one of your earlier
chapters, so I'm glad you decided to build that relationship and show us
how it came about. I'm also looking forward to what Anand-san referred
to as your Usagi Prelude, in which you possibly tell us what happens when
Ranma confronts the senshi. *grin* THAT is something I'm definitely
going to read.
to use the time gate with her being already in the palace performing
'with her already being in'
errands. She at once knew the implications of this arrival. This was
'knew at once the'
told me what must be done. I have come tell you that SHE must be
saved from an event that will effect the Moon Kingdom."
Damn, I just love/hate it when you present us with an ambiguous
reference. Always gets me wondering as to what you're scheming next...
"A week's time. You will have to find a mission that will
occupy her time. If you do not she will not survive."
'You must find a mission that will occupy her for that long.'
"Thank-you your majesty," Pluto murmured gratefully. "It
'Thank you your'
made a joke and had the faintest wisp of a smile on her lips. "Can
'made a joke. She had the faintest wisp of a smile on her lips.'
her loneliest senshi. The years will be most harsh on her for what
Grammar was never my strong point, but I THINK it's supposed to be 'The
years would be most'. Although I think the sentence itself is a bit hard
to understand...
Pluto craned her neck a little bit more her right side. She
'more to her right side.'
"Pluto? Are you paying attention?" Queen Serenity sighed as
she took note of where Pluto's eyes strayed to. It seemed the Royal
Ball Pluto and Endymion attended together left a deep impression on
the Guardian of Time. Duty had forced Serenity to have one of her
senshi escort him when her daughter had been too sick to attend.
Little would she know that this would come from it.
BWAHAHAHAHAAAA!!! Never would've seen THAT coming. Pluto having
feelings for Endymion. Now that's what I was hoping someone would do;
show a side of Pluto that wasn't cold or withdrawn. Bravo.
As if in answer to her prayers, a figure suddenly appeared
right over top of Pluto and fell on top of her.
'a figure suddenly appeared precisely over Pluto and fell'
He didn't have to scramble that fast off of me, Pluto thought
darkly of the boy. He acted as if she were some disease. Endymion
*grin* Beautiful and hilarious way of showing Setsuna's feelings. Might
change it to 'Pluto thought darkly towards the boy.' Or maybe just
'Pluto thought darkly.'
Usagi, that seemed like a nice name. "I'm sure it is a case of
mistaken identification."
Nani yo? Does that mean Usagi wasn't her original name? Argh! I've
never really take the time to understand completely the SM timeline
thing. So, the person Ranma is currently talking to is Queen Serenity,
Usagi's mother? And later, Serena will eventually be able to transform
into Serenity? Too weird for me. Someone please explain....
That should still allow her a few moments to talk with
the boy alone, Serenity thought and she did not want Pluto to
become anymore suspicious. "That will be fine. Send them in."
'That should still allow her a few moments to talk with the boy alone,
Serenity thought. She did not want Pluto to become anymore suspicious.'
"That's because she is Sailor Pluto." It was inadvertent,
but Serenity was still glad with the knowledge that the Sailor
Senshi would accompany her daughter in Ranma's time.
'still glad with the knowledge'? It's a bit confusing. Maybe use
something other than 'glad'. 'Preoccupied' maybe? Or 'relieved'.
else that can be done. Take some time off and enjoy what
little time of peace we still have." Serenity tried hard to keep
'Take some time off and try to enjoy what little peace we still have
left.'
"You're welcome." Mercury smiled brightly. It wasn't
really that much of a chore to baby sit this human. She looked
him over once again. Definitely not a baby.
Hehe. Go Mercury Go!!
Ranma grinned as he looked around at the bodies of
various soldiers littered around him.
Love it when Ranma kicks some @$$.
"You're pretty good human. How about you go up against me?"
'You're pretty good, human.'
Ranma was about to answer that he didn't fight girls but
quickly squashed that notion. Makoto, he knew, did not like being
thought of as weak. He tried to think of a way out. "Hmm... I'd like
to. But I'm getting kind of hungry. You wouldn't have a snack I
could munch on first do you?"
NANI?!?!?! Ranma thinking before he speaks? Ranma NOT antagonizing a
beautiful woman? Sounds too good to be true....
like the others and was more cool and distant to strangers
than the her of his time.
'distant to strangers than the Pluto of his time.'
He didn't mean what he said about it not being a
lovers' spat? What? Where did that thought come from?
He meant about her not being special and a wonderful
woman. That didn't seem right either. "So, you like me?"
Whew!! Down girl, down!
"What? No, I mean, yes." A year of guarding his words
around the girls in his life, really hurt the sincerity of his voice,
Ranma found out.
'guarding his words around the girls in his life really hurt'
Pluto didn't notice. She couldn't believe she voiced
out that question out loud.
'voiced that question out loud.'
were starting a affect her.
'were starting to affect her.'
If he shudders, Pluto was going to smack him. "I have
'he shudders, I'm going to smack him, Pluto thought.'
first place. The woman that gave him he met was somewhere in
this seeming aloof senshi. "Thanks, for taking me."
'Thanks for taking me.'
Just hold on to me and let me do the rest." She nodded as
Ranma wrapped his arms around her waist. Invoking the power of
her staff, the both of them vanished.
Mercury looked questioningly at her friends. "Since when did
you need to hold on to Pluto when she traveled?"
<Raised Eyebrow> Getting a bit sneaky there, ne Setsuna-san? Hehe.
large jumps in time. It would only work if he live as long as she
'if he lived as long'
Queen Serenity. "Your majesty, you're still alive."
'you're still alive!'
this is too much too ask for, but will you do it?"
'this is too much to ask'
"At some future time you will perform an act of kindness for
me, despite the complications that may arise. Allow me to do the same.
I
What's Serenity talking about?
Pluto wiped her face of the grief. She held out her staff in
front her. She had promised she wouldn't change history, but she
did not say she would not look. She will share the pain her fellow
senshi endured.
'She would share the pain her fellow senshi had endured.'
Setsuna blushed. It was almost two hundred times
since she watched Nodoka give birth to one Saotome Ranma.
"You're welcome to watch my birth."
Can you say fetish?
"What's that supposed to mean." She watched as Ranma
'What's that supposed to mean?'
Present day...
Ranma waited patiently at the bridge with a box of chocolates
in his hands. This was his second week in a row. It was only fair he
figured. One thousand years to two weeks didn't seem like very much.
Setsuna appeared two days later.
* * * * *
The End. (maybe)
Okay, okay. So I'm slow. Okay, so it takes me a while to understand an
ending sometimes. In this fic's case, I'm just not getting it. What did
this ending mean, Donny-san? Anyway, great work again. I look forward
to getting more of your work soon. Ja mata!
doKuSHInsHA
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