-----Original Message-----
From: Donny <chengdo@shaw.wave.ca>
To: ffml@fanfic.com <ffml@fanfic.com>
Date: Saturday, April 11, 1998 4:19 AM
Subject: [FFML] [Ranma][SailorMoon]Preludes and Interludes: Setsuna

very rough because of it.  This is also my longest episode of this
series.  Hope you enjoy.

Setsuna-chan!  Setsuna-chan!  YEAH!!!  Been waiting for this one, Donny...

Serenity trembled and grasped the arms of her throne to steady herself
when the looked upon the emotional senshi.  Pluto should not have needed

she looked

told me what must be done.  I have come tell you that SHE must be saved

>from an event that will effect the Moon Kingdom."

SHE?  Usagi?  The younger Pluto?

"A week's time.  You will have to find a mission that will occupy her
time.  If you do not she will not survive."

Guess it was Pluto...

Serenity did not want to lie to Pluto, but the need was too great.
What mission could she send her on that will not seem suspicious?

'that would not'  instead of 'that will not'  I think....

As if in answer to her prayers, a figure suddenly appeared right over
top of Pluto and fell on top of her.

appeared right over Pluto...  (don't need 'top of')

He didn't have to scramble that fast off of me, Pluto thought darkly of
the boy.  He acted as if she were some disease.  Endymion didn't seem to

LOL  that was great...

"Oh.  She was a nice to me.  I guess I can do this favor for her,

'was nice'

Ranma bit his tongue to stop from speaking out.  Ami, Makoto, Minako,
and Rei were the senshi also?  His cousin had a lot of explaining to do.

This was the *only* glaring error, IMO...  You absolutely *have* to describe
Ranma's first meeting with the girls after he finds out who they are.  If
not in this episode, in another one.  Maybe Prelude about Usagi?  *hint*
*hint*

different from their future counterparts.  "Thank you Mercury-san.  That
was most kind of you.  You are a very nice person."

Hey, Ranma's is starting to wise-up a bit.  Good idea, sticking his foot
into his mouth too many times around so many suitors would be rather
unhealthy.

"I hate break up this lovers' spat, but you're needed Pluto.  We can't

'hate to'

Endymion.  The image popped up in her mind again as she thought of his
name.  His handsome face.  His dark hair.  His pigtail.  Pigtail!?

great scene.

Just hold on to me and let me do the rest."  She nodded as Ranma
wrapped his arms around her waist.  Invoking the power of her staff, the
both of them vanished.

Mercury looked questioningly at her friends.  "Since when did you need
to hold on to Pluto when she traveled?"

Setsuna, sly old gal...

Ranma waved to the fading image of Pluto until she was entirely gone.
It was time to call a cousin of his.  Usagi explanation better be good.

Once again, show us that explanation...  ^_^

Great one Donny, Like I said i was waiting for this one...  And no, you
didn't disappoint at all.

As always, looking forward to more.

-Anand