Ranchan <ranchan@total.net> wrote:

  He had laughed at her, laughed at her story.  Later when 
they came face to face with the monster Ranma was no longer 
laughing.  It had been a huge thing.  They confronted it and the 
battle had been long and hard.  Both Ranma and Akane were
badly hurt, still they continued on unabated.

Give us some description of the beastie, please. "A huge thing" is
rather vague.

  Ranma had completely torn the room which he was occupying asunder.  
Dr. Tofu ran and tried to subdue Ranma.  "Ranma, stop!" he screamed, 
"You'll hurt yourself!  Ranma calm down please!"  Ranma did not hear 
him, that or he chose not to heed his calls to stop. Ranma simply 
batted Tofu away.  He crashed into a cabinet which housed the sedatives 
he used to put the patients out when they were in too much pain.  He 
quickly grabbed a needle and filled it with the sedative.  

Why not just use a pressure point?


This is nicely done... the only problem, which is not at all your fault,
is that the concept is a way overused one. There've been huge numbers of
fics based on one character having died and the others having to react
to it.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics