I liked this.

The story seems like kind of standard alterniverse fare, but you've got a
nice, brisk writing style that really appeals to me.  I also like the way
you worked out the bathroom scene.

I anxiously await chapter 2. :)

Hunter Kid
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    The older man, Genma, snorted.  "Believe me, boy.  The Conerians aren't
the brightest bunch around, but they know a Pravok name when they hear one.
 One whisper of our real names to them, and we're goners."  He made a
gesture of a sword slicing through a neck, which was enough to quell any of
Ryoga's complaints.
    "Fine, fine," Ryoga consented with a sigh.  "I still think it's sort of
a dishonorable thing to do, hiding our identities and all."
    Genma smirked.  "Better dishonorable than dead, boy.  You'd best
remember that."
					 	-from Song of the Lute, chapter 1
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