Normally, I don't reply to the whole ML (unless I screw up and hit
reply-to-all), but this time I felt that this was something the whole ML
should see.

Douglas, this is without a doubt your best work.  Not because it was dark,
not because it was violent (to me, child abuse is horrifically violent), but
because of the way you did the characters.

Everyone in ther fic was completely in-character, from Usagi's mother/sister
conflicts, to Mamoru's moping and self-hatred, to the attitudes and actions
of the other Senshi.  (Well, Rei was a little too bitchy for my tastes, but
we'll save my Senshi biases for another forum.)  I never found myself going
"oh please, they would NEVER act that way."  That's not to say the fic was
predictable, to the contrary, you threw me for a loop more than a few times,
and it made the fics even more enjoyable.

Now, for the criticism.  First, I'd recommend looking at the way you do
temporal mechanics.  I was never quite clear on the way things worked in
this universe.  Second, why does Chibi-Usa have to die at 36?  It seemed to
serve no viable purpose other than to make the reader depressed.

Good work, Douglas, I look forward to your next stuff.

--
Christopher "God-boy" Angel
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"I'm your worst nightmare - a manga
nut with a power ring."  Green Lantern