On Fri, 20 Mar 1998, Ong Shih Lin wrote:

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Ranma sat on the hill, lying on the soft summer grass. Idly, he watched
the clouds above slowly drift by him as he thought about the day. Today
had not been a good day for him, first of all it was his birthday.

Secondly ... what?
If you use the phrase First of all, it infers that there is more than one
thing going on.

just wanted a break from the usual 'activities', that wasn't too much to
ask was it?

This seems like it sould be in two sentances.

 By the end of school, when Akane had tried to scold him for flirting
with Shampoo, he had ignored.

he had ignored her.

 It was unfair, life certainly was.

It is awkward, this sentance is.

 He wiped away the wetness on his cheeks, man did not cry.

men did not cry.

 " Ranma?" He turned surprised that someone had found him.
 " What is it," He replied monotonelessly, as he stared straight at the
blue heavens.
 " Here." Something was being offered to him, a wrapped up parcel.  "I'm
sorry I forgot your birthday."
 He sat up, cocking his head to one side as he looked at the girl in
front of him with a new light. He smiled, his first happy smile that
day.
 " Thanks." Perhaps life wasn't so bad after all, he couldn't think of
anyone else he would want to remember his birthday.

And he opened the gift to find a black rose?

Sorry, couldn't resist.  Kodachi is the only fiancee who isn't mentioned
above, and I the least likely someone would write a WAFF-type fic about
(well, maybe Happosai holds that dubious distinciton).

End

-Ranma Ranma
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Oyaji-san!  Mallet-san!