Need some input... anyone whose read my rough for chapter 2, preferably.

I'm thinking of rewriting Chapter 2, what little I actually have, from
scratch and want some other opinions, cause I'm kinda torn on it. I like
what I've got so far, but I think I'm moving it a long too fast, and to
slow it down I'd wanna do some other things, so I'd rewrite it.

Any and ALL opinions will help me out... please send em :)

And if you wanna read what I currently have just so you can tell me to
rewrite it, it's at:
http://netnow.micron.net/~saotome/

Any comments would be appreciated.

Thanks tons,
Mark Eymer